| "The Depth Of Demon Bonds" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
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Reviewed By: German_spaz On: March 14, 2005 14:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have to be the only person I have ever written a review for so this is a big deal. You totally ROCK!!! I love your story and can't wait to see how it unfolds in the next chapters. Keep the good times rolling. (p.s. I have never really liked this couple together before you wrote this. I was a firm non-gay coupling in this show. But now if this happened in the show that wouldn't be so bad.^-~. I heart shape you!)
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Reviewed By: nli On: March 08, 2005 13:27 CST
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Yes, Yomi is definitely blind. And if you don't know who is responsible, you REALLY should find out before you write him into any story involving Kurama. ~_^
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Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 14:32 CST
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hahahahahahahaha ... great chpaters ... but I don't think I'm going to forget about that phone call for a while! Too cute the way you have things going with the boys ... and the double talk to Yusuke ... that was just great ^_~
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Reviewed By: Hieis Shadow (too lazy to sign in again) On: March 05, 2005 17:36 CST
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AWESOME! So yummies, yo!
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Reviewed By: Hieis Shadow (too lazy to sign in) On: March 03, 2005 22:40 CST
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*stabs self with a pencil* do you want me to die?!? LOL Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 15:43 CST
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OI! What're you doin to them? Kurama even CONTEMPLATING going to Yomi *shudders* on purpose? ewwwww ... At least Hiei had enough presence of mind to tell the kitsune no to that! *hopes to see a marked improvement in their relationship next chapter*
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Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 02:11 CST
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Loved the chapter! They boys get to plat a bit and it came across well in my opinion. Sounded just the right amount of playful and vengeful at the same time ... hehe, makes for a good foreplay scenario ^_~
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Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2005 04:10 CST
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Cute chapter ^__^ I look forward to the rest of the story.
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Reviewed By: StormAz (not signed in) On: February 20, 2005 00:57 CST
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aaaaaarrrrrrgggggghhhhhh ... it happened again! Caught up with the author -_- The story itself is cute, the grammer could use a little work though. Couple places you have the ... right word with the wrong spelling? That's the easiest way for me to describe it. And in some places the use of what would be considered more "street slang" than the proper english that Shuuichi would use. But that's ok, my brain actually wanders through and automatically corrects things like that if the story is interesting enough ^_~ (which it was so far ...)
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Reviewed By: Heidi On: February 15, 2005 13:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aaaaarrrrrrggggghhhhh!!!! But you are right, you could have just have just left it as a cliffy. I love the pace that you are going with the story. I know that I have said that before but a good story can be ruined if it moves to fast or to slow. And the char. are the type that will not just jump into anything. (emotionally anyway)Thanks again for sharing your great talent and a wonderful story. I simply can not wait until you post the next chap. Heidi
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: CrescentArcher [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 12:58 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good so far please keep going
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 22:05 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Still loving it. Great playful, but careful fox. Poor Hiei, trying to hide his feelings. I look forward to seeing how things progress in the next chapter. Please hurry back!
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Reviewed By: Heidi On: February 04, 2005 12:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! You are going at a wonderful pace. I really like the way the story line flows and I love the interaction between char. I would tell you to hurry and update but I know that it should not be rushed. Again, wonderful story.
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Reviewed By: Heidi On: February 02, 2005 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just wanted to let you know that I thought this chapter sounds like the beginning of a great story. I can't wait till you post more. I love your writing style.
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Reviewed By: betanerd On: January 28, 2005 19:12 CST
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It's a nice idea for a fic, but you need to stop switching back and forth between first person and third person exposition. When they're both referring to the same person, 'he' and 'I' should never be used in the same paragraph. It's a confusing literary no-no. (e.g., "He knew if it didn't stop soon he was going to be in trouble. I could go to Genkai's to see if Yukina is there, maybe she could heal me." It just doesn't work.) Either write the whole thing in the first person with POVs clearly stated, or write it in the third person with the characters' occasional thought processes denoted by italics.
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