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| "Broken Promises" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: flowers [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 16:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your fic. This was a great read and flowed very well. The only problems I can pick out are grammatical. You should try writing out a number's name instead of the numerical character, it gives the story a novel feel and reads more eloquently. And the author's note at the top may be taken better if moved to the end. I've encountered people actually skipping stories due to an author's note being so lengthy and situated at the beginning of a story, this happened to me in my own fanfiction. Omitting author's notes altogether is best unless you feel the need to clear something up or you have a warning. Giving a story a "chat" atmosphere at the beginning leads to not being taken seriously. Also, your use of () could be off-putting. Try using a semicolon, comma, or making the text itallic instead of placing () around it. All in all this was interesting and fun to read. Very imaginative and informational to anyone who has wondered about what happened inbetween sagas.
| Title: ::BOWS::
Reviewed By: Summoner Rekka [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 00:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
::sobs:: So sad! I loved it! The relationship with Link and Zelda fit so well! I had always wondered what had happened to the Triforce of Courage. Hmm... Maybe the next game can explain like your fic did! Awesome!
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