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| "The Guardian" Reviews/Comments [ 51 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: Shabopo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 01:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can never remember if I've reviewed or not, so if this is a repeat, sorry 'bout that. Heh, do you know how much I love this story? It's so incredibly well-written...! I think I'm still the obnoxious reviewer begging for the pairing to change to Kag/Kur, as I don't think any of the others could kill Sesshoumaru. [sigh] The whole angst thing is so well-done! ...twisted. You had to wonder last chapter- did he save Kirara, Kouga, Miroku, and Sango because he grew to care for her, or was he being his sadistic self? And we find out. He's still a sexy sadistic taiyoukai with a yen for causing humiliation.
| Reviewed By: Baby_red On: April 25, 2005 09:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great!Now pls. do update or my sexy boy assassin will come and get you.
| Reviewed By: crazy-punk-gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 00:13 CDT
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Hi's! I love how you did this chapter! Hiei being really ticked off is such a funny thing, especailly without his katana, ne? I find it very hilarious. Poor Kagome's mom, she has to worry about her little girl a lot now. Kurama and Hiei are defintely going to the shrine with or without permission. They should stay away like they were suppoed to. Who knows what dangers will happen!... except you, the writer. Anyway, love how you did the chapter! Really fun and enjoyable. I really can't believe this is a Hiei/Kagome pairing with Kurama being her close friend. There defintely will be jealously going around in this story! Please update soon! *~*crazy-punk-gurl*~*
| Reviewed By: InuKitsuneMiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 19:39 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazing story. I haven't read a crossover this good in ages. Very interesting, please write more. I can't wait for Kagome, Hiei, and Kurama to meet! I enjoy Kagome/Hiei very much, but from that part where Youko and Kagome met, it almost makes me want Kurama/Kagome. Almost :3 Small catch, Kilala is spelled Kirara, from what I've heard. Otherwise, immpeccable (I can't believe I just said that word) spelling and grammer. Congratulations on an awesome fic!
| Reviewed By: tbiris(not logged in) On: April 17, 2005 19:49 CDT
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that was interesting.
| Title: Ignore the idiot...
Reviewed By: InuMiko(nsi) On: April 17, 2005 18:48 CDT
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Hey, I just wanted to tell you that I love your story, and I am in my mid forties. So please ignore the idiot who said that your story would only appeal to teenagers. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing. Your writing style is refreshing, and you have a lot of fans. :) Hope you update again soon! Donna
| Reviewed By: wynter89(mm) On: April 17, 2005 16:17 CDT
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wow, i really like it, cant wait for an update!! i am more interested int kag/kur relationships. and with the way you started it i was like "you go kurama" anyway really loved it. good luck may kami-sama be with you
| Reviewed By: Kuramas Gurl (too lazy to log in) On: April 17, 2005 16:04 CDT
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weeeeeee, good chapter. I wait for the next one. ja ne!
| Title: Since you appear to want it so badly
Reviewed By: Kei, arcticslap@yahoo.com On: April 17, 2005 14:49 CDT
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If you consider this "trivial," you can expect your work to always be mediocre. Details make or break a story. Yet many readers don't know the difference, so you get away with it. For example, Hiei's mother was koorime. But unless you're saying he's a hermaphrodite or a clone, he isn't one himself. One of those 'unimportant' details. As you attempted to say, it's your prerogative to use Fangirlese. Don't act surprised when you get reviews like this. It's also mine to read and reply when you do. Yes, Yoshihiro Togashi(one creator since we're nitpicking) has a fondness for puns. But you obviously have no respect for the intricacies of the Japanese language. If you truly had someone fluent in it, they would have corrected your misuse. A single word often has MANY meanings dependant on usage and kanji. Alteration of words by a mangaka comes from taking kanji and splicing it. But when you've proven less than proficient in English, it would be unfair to expect you to grasp that concept. That said, there is nothing compelling to your work. It's not the character having an experience. It's you saying the character is having an experience. You lose sight of characterization and fail to hold to dynamics of individual personalities. Your prose stagnates in trying to be dramatic. Your plot is both contrived and juvenile. Lacking real depth and imagination. But don't fret, you might still be popular among 14 and under. And BTW, it's boxers. Not everyone is female.
| Reviewed By: Arctic_Kitsune On: April 17, 2005 03:14 CDT
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A part of me wonders just how or why this trend started. Regardless, you've aided in proving it's still alive and well. When you don't understand Japanese, it's better err on the side of caution and not use Japanese beyond names and perhaps a suffix or two. For your most glaring error, Koorime means ice MAIDEN. It's a gender specific term, and no, there is no "but sometimes it can be male" to this one. It is always MAIDEN. I also have no idea why you feel the urge to slide in "onna," or "daijoubu," or "baka" either. Aside from the obvious need to prove you're cool enough to use common Fangirlese. As for Toushin, it's a term that -depending on the kanji being used- can mean anything from body proportions, to investment trusts, to suicide by jumping in a river, to sword blade. I don't know who told you this means War God. If you just picked this up on your own from names given in an anime you've seen or you were told by a friend, I don't know. It doesn't mean what you think it means. If you really must try to say "God of War" go with something like Hachiman or Marishiten. Or why not just do the logical thing and say "God of War?" Can't go wrong with good old fashion English when it's obviously your native tongue. Although you might still, but I'll reserve judgment until you actually use it. Please, for those of us who know more than what we find in a manga or a dictionary, stick to a language you know. There's only so much we can be amused before it just hurts.
| Reviewed By: deafening silence(not signed in) On: April 16, 2005 22:55 CDT
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Simply amazing. I was getting so angry with myself because i couldn't read any faster than i was. I really thought we were going to get a confrontation this chapter, but i guess with kagome i the condition she's in, i wouldn't have lasted long. kagome: what are you youkai doing he- *faints* kurama: well, that was rather dissapointing hiei: hn Anyway, you have no idea how glad i was to read what you had written in your a/n. I can't stand it when authors write an uber-kagome who could destroy the entire spirit squad with the power stored in her little finger nail! Well, i have to get going, or i'd leave some more feedback. next chapter i guess! ja!
| Title: rocknroll7806
Reviewed By: rocknroll7806 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2005 22:19 CDT
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DAMN... i thought Hiei was gunnA blowwwwwww! jeeze! better watch out yusuke. nice update. later.
| Reviewed By: phalon22 (not signed in) On: March 30, 2005 19:53 CST
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Great story so far, however I think it should be a KurKags with how the has been going but you're the chapter. Please update soon!
| Title: Ryu-Sama
Reviewed By: Ryu Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2005 16:15 CST
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this is a pretty good plot you have going here, but how are you going to have kagome a "guardian" of a barrier if she really doesnt know how to fight and is already defended by the spirit detectives? oh, by the way, to get to the url for the fanfictions on that yahoo site, you have to have a yahoo ID. you might want to set up a site that is available to everyone instead of making people join yahoo to read a fanfiction to satisfy their hentai minds...... oh, and UPDATE!!
| Reviewed By: Sesshy81 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2005 11:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Ohhhhh, Great!!! More very soon please!? Huh?? Come on! *chibi puppy-eyes* PLEASE?????
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