Title: Hm..
Reviewed By: Seraphis On: March 22, 2005 14:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good story, however, you really need to rewrite it, perhaps get a beta-reader. Some of the parts are hard to understand, such as near the beginning when Schu's slipping out of the window. Also, Ran's taken a bit too much OOC, but other than that, it was good. ^^
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