| "Reach Out and Touch Someone" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Meatball Head [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2009 04:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I greatly enjoyed this story! So delightfully seductive and angsty...I adored it very much XD Great job ;) cyn x
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Title: oy
Reviewed By: It's Camaro On: March 29, 2005 12:23 CST
Comment/Review:
Well, I think it's extremely well written and very realistic. I think that you really went the extra mile to inculcate Gohan's marriage in there whereas a lot of fics seem to make either Goku or Gohan the heartless shit who goes out on their wife and doesn't really give a damn. It was very well written. Course' I lost all respect for it once you had everyone sitting around in a big group crying like fat women at Weight Watchers but hey, some people like that. ::shrugs:: Camaro
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: March 26, 2005 21:25 CST
Comment/Review:
It was very very good but only one part had a problem alright I liked it all except the its a saiyan thing... it stood out like a sore thumb and detracted from the rest of the story... your story was very good and it actually took away from it, like its the excuse that gohan likes trunks... then its not love, its need and it takes away from the bond of the two characters... it was one paragraph that didn't fit with the rest of the story... it lacked flow... you didn't need to put the v/G in there it was actually menial and degraded your story... one that was really really good... try when you write to stick with the flow and when you have something that mentions something so menial that makes no sense with the story there is really no point... I'm sorry I really really liked it though but out of 8 chaperts that part just killed me and didn't make sense so I feel like it took away from the story majorly.
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