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| "The One Seto Fell in Love With" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Wee!
Reviewed By: ShirachiChan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2005 12:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wee!Update soon!Hahaha!I'm hyper in the mornings^-^*Eats a Choco Hershey Bar,Icecream,and Tootsie Rolls*YUMMIE!
| Reviewed By: Seto,Draco and Kai lover! On: April 06, 2005 15:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love you style and i really enjoyed your stories!!! how ever its not really very oringal (sp?) but still a gr8 read...... I LOVE IT!!
| Reviewed By: MidnightFalcon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 02:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your idea, but I'm afraid you'll need a lot more improvement before it can become a good fic. For example, you should add punctuation to your dialog, and a little bit of discription wouldn't hurt either. I like how your spelling is perfect, and you began at a perfect place, IMO. However, I can't help but think that the story is going too fast. It's a little unrealistic, and your dialog isn't very convincing, I'm afraid. However, I still like the story, and I really hope you continue! It'll help to add descriptions of their surroundings, and how the characters act. For example, does Seto cross his arms when he speaks? And Joey would probably be a little more angry at Tristan if he told Joey that he needed to be a much better duelist to beat Seto - judging by the anime, Joey would complain and accuse Tristan of taking the enemy's side, and so on. If you think I've judged your fic unfairly, feel free to contact me. thewarfgenesisthree@yahoo.com.au Good luck!
| Reviewed By: tabaco On: February 03, 2005 18:06 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Haha! Dukes a pervert :D! Great job so far :D!
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