Title: *blinks*
Reviewed By: shaynie On: May 20, 2005 22:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
You may want to try pulling the overhanded Christian gospel quoting down a bit. Not only would Emma Frost *never* once tell someone that the way to fix someone is to make them read the bible daily, the thought would probably abhor her. The reason she is the Ice Queen is because she's logical and rational. If you take a bit more time on the style itself it would flow easier, and take a bit more time to copy edit before posting. We all want to get things out as soon as possible, but posting before proofing just makes for silly errors (believe me I do it all the time). Good luck.
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