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| "A day at Horakis" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Esq.
Reviewed By: Ferd Berfel On: February 17, 2005 22:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
The good part: Kodama is genuinely hot as a gentle playful dominatrix having her way with Shinji. Your dialogue is stilted and unnatural and sounds like it was written by a non-native speaker of English, but I've seen worse. The bad part: Nozomi is, what, eleven, twelve years old? WTF were you thinking, man?
| Reviewed By: priest off line On: February 08, 2005 01:39 CST
Comment/Review:
i realy enjoied this story and i would not mind seeing a sequel to it in the future. keep up the good work and i look forward to more of your stories in the future. =(^_^)= Ja-ne
| Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 11:20 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was good. I liked the twist of the Horaki sisters (youi have given me an idea for All About Eva), and the fact that it was not too graphic. Until the next time.
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