| "A day at Horakis" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Title: OH GOD I CAME BUCKETS
Reviewed By: Slothen On: January 09, 2009 06:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an absolutely excellent bit of fanfiction. All of the characters seemed to be actually in-character (except Shinji comes off a bit strong during the first confrontation with Hikari). Staying true to the characters, as well as exploring their feelings and emotions made it even more of an engrossing read. Finally, I love that you wrote about the Horakis! The subject itself made reading this a fresh experience. I love your style. Switching between different points of view in the narrative keeps it interesting. Good diction and syntax keep the reading natural, never awkward (which can happen in some lemons), and add instead of detract from the story. Best NGE lemon I've read period. This includes illustrated doujins. And in case I haven't mentioned it, GO HIKARI!
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Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2007 03:50 CST
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Great stuff, always one my more perverted Eva fanties, right up there with Shinji and multiple Rei clones at once. Nozomi is a bit young, but from all descriptions the 3 sisters are nearly identical only seperated by age. Plus shinji is around 14.. 12 to 14 isn't to big of a deal. People who complain about her age are just thinking of themself instead of the story, not to mention she's usualy portrayed as more mature mentaly then Hikari. I loved this and would like a sequel, the actual sex was not best i have ever read. But you did the characters emotions well and the whole situation was just to hot for it to matter.
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Reviewed By: E On: May 24, 2006 01:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
man that was a one of the best fics i have ever read and i hope that you make more like this i will look out for your work from now on and i hope that you make more about shinji and hikari nice twist. ~E~
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Reviewed By: l3lue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2006 01:27 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is something u rarely see a shinji hikari fic with kohdama(srry id i spelt her name wrong) its very original good job keep up the good work.... are u gonna do a seual?
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Title: the young gun
Reviewed By: kd8gun On: September 28, 2005 22:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one of the best romance fics I have ever read for evangelion ever. It is put together great and has a great ending. Out of the fourty plus eva fics I have read tis has made my top ten. The only one shot I have actually enjoyed. By the way about my title's meaning. Kd8gun is the fcc callsign I got asigned when I got my amature radio license. My dad and step mom got a amature radio license too. My dad is kb8gun, my stepmom is kc8gun, and I am kd8gun. The young gun.
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Title: whoah
Reviewed By: DEath-By-Minnow (NLI) On: September 05, 2005 14:48 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... You hold the patent on unusual lemons for Eva. I read your other one a while ago "An Unusual Lemon-etc." and that one was just as out there. Aside from minor grammer/word placement mistakes that generaly don't interrupt the story, that was absolute perfection. I'm gonna go share this twisted fic with a few friends now.
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Reviewed By: Mike Manazure [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2005 13:35 CDT
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Mr. Vader This fic is original, well written (as only non-americans can value such correct use of English, not Amerikanisch), interesting and flowing. In other words is everything my fics aren't. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: car2fast On: August 01, 2005 01:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This is by far the most amazing hentai fanfiction that i have ever read, and ive read quite a few. Excelent grammar, which is not often found. Amazing storyline, and wonderful ending. Bravo. My only recomendation is that you spice up your intro on the main page a little. I passed over this story a few times before i read it.
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Reviewed By: Gah! On: June 04, 2005 00:50 CDT
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Heh, this is a very good fanfic and it's a very original idea. Oh, and to everyone who thinks it's considerably disturbing about the youngest sister at the end, there are far more sick and perverted bastards who use younger characters.
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Reviewed By: lemon lover On: May 13, 2005 11:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude i really think u should have a follow up becuase this was the best fanfic i have eveer read and it wasnt with anyone but Hikari and her family. I have read some fanfics with Hikari but they were only one chapter for her and it should have been longer.
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Reviewed By: Till On: April 28, 2005 22:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great stuff, original enteresting and better overall then 90% of the other bland eva adult fics around. This is one story that definantly deserves a followup of some kind.
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Title: a day at horakis
Reviewed By: Priest [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 02:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i thought this was an original aproach to the whom gets Shinji question. i would like to see more of this story in the future, dose he "sleep" with the youngest sister and how do the other cast members react to this new development in there lives. please keep up the good work on this and your other stories.
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Reviewed By: deckman On: February 24, 2005 11:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Decent story, interesting twist. Definitely not sure about the inclusion of Nozomi, she's a bit young. Maybe if she had just curled up on top of them or something, it wouldn't ring so badly. Grammar could use a bit of work, there were some odd word choices here and there that interrupted the flow of the reading. Possibly you are not a native speaker? Still, a "cleaner" read than some of your other fiction, so you are improving. Keep up the good work!
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Title: Good Fic
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: February 22, 2005 04:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent fic. I'm not sure about having the youngest sister in on it though. I liked how the oldest sister started out to train him and then got attached to him so much that she didn't want to let him go to Hikari.
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Title: Good Fic
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: February 22, 2005 04:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent fic. I'm not sure about having the youngest sister in on it though. I liked how the oldest sister started out to train him and then got attached to him so much that she didn't want to let him go to Hikari.
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