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Reviewed By: celliegirl94 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 01:12 CDT
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You know how you said shampoo went to the philppines and the president went to her restrant well I was like 'OHMIGAWD!' because the president of the philppines is like my.....step-grandma? My grandma's brother is married to the president basicly....u have never met her but My older brother has!
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Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2006 15:02 CDT
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akanes a real bitch she heard him confess at jensudo but she never returned that confession i know i would not admit to loving someone a second time under such a circumstance beliveing they would just use it to make fun and torment also why does she always blame ranma he is almost never at fault
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Title: Duh
Reviewed By: Taro MD On: January 16, 2006 00:23 CST
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Course I knew that
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Reviewed By: Ryukuros On: January 15, 2006 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
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The point in thr first chapter from here: " "So they're come back for more!" She decided to play the quiet game and quietly climbed out of her window, as soon as she got on the roof she discovered the faint sound to come from her baka finance as he was on his side curled up into a ball, quietly she approached him and hears a near silent sobbing." to here "'I... I... love you too Ranma...'" Is almost an EXACT copy of part of the first chapter of Resolution. Some of it is word for word, with the rest changed here and there to make it sound different. The rest is probably original, but that one scene is an almost direct copy.
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Reviewed By: ukyou-chan On: August 04, 2005 05:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its really good. its kinda short though. great job. Ja.
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Reviewed By: iatnehfoimak [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2005 01:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
its a nice lemon, but not a good story...you gleem over details way too much...for this story to be on st. fan it needs much more details and plot...i have read all of it...all of them have very good plot and lemon... not just blind ass lemons
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Title: Sweet
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2005 18:21 CDT
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Nicely done, my friend. I feel honored that my little haphazard fanfic inspired part of your story; thank you very much.
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Title: Taro MD
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2005 02:12 CDT
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It'll also be the last chapter before I start on the epilogue and that'll be the end of the story
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Title: Keep it up
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2005 20:40 CDT
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Noticed you'd added Chap. 4 a little while ago. Thanks for your recent review of my own fic; the next chapter is in progress. I do notice one problem still cropping up, grammatical errors here and there. Make sure you don't mix up your present and past tenses; might also want to double-check punctuation in a few cases. As it is, I like the way things have shaped up and I also appreciate the apology from Ryoga to Ranma. VERY interesting behavior from Akari; I only know what I've read about her and she doesn't sound like a control type- but then again, you never know. Highly amusing, and now Ranma and Akane are bound for parenthood, too. Good job, just watch the grammar and don't be afraid to add a little more detail.
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Title: Taro MD
Reviewed By: Taro M.D [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 01:50 CDT
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I'll be revealing that in the next chapter
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Reviewed By: jade_0rchid On: April 02, 2005 15:36 CST
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Did Ranma get cured of the curse? If not then they are only half married.
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Title: More please
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2005 08:38 CST
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Interesting to say the least. Noticed some grammatical errors here and there, also could use a tad more description here and there. Maybe you could throw in a bit of happiness for the other characters as well- the Ryoga/Akari pairing is a good one, not sure who to pair with Ukyo though. As for the Amazons, it might be interesting if Shampoo DOESN'T end up with Mousse, but someone else instead. Just an off-the-wall thought. Maybe she hooks up with Pantyhose Taro? However you decide to continue this, keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: February 28, 2005 12:02 CST
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Now this series is guaranteed to be put up at the Ranma Lemon Fanfiction Archieve of stfan.free.fr.
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: February 20, 2005 06:11 CST
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Maybe... I Don't think this is compared to Resolution, first of all most of the rivals decided to become friends to Ranma and Akane... I just put in to what I reckon actually happens to them, Kunos in the asylum, Shampoo and Mousse end up going back to the village and Ukyo moves on with her life. Ryoga fully deserves what he gets and maybe I'll give him a happy ending with Akari. Now I haven't mention the Tendos or Saotomes yet... I will
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Reviewed By: doug newton On: February 20, 2005 05:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have always loved R/A fics this is good so far but there is some simalaritys between this and Kaleen Darkmoons Resolution. you should be careful.
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