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| "Sparring Partners" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2005 23:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a cute fic. I love Su-chan, and while I believe Motoko is about 60% ball-breaker, she has her good points as well. The only large problem that detracted from my enjoyment of your fic is that your characterisation of Su seems a bit off... not too far, but just enough for me to notice... or maybe I'm imagining it... but she seems a tad more serious than she should. I don't just mean the really emotional sad part: that's understandable, but she seems to have a far more serious attitude than is typical for our Su-chan for most of this fic. In the first glomping and what followed, and the part at the end about frisking, she seems completely natural, but the rest seems a bit off. Still, I congradulate you for correctly delving as far into Su's insanity as you have, and I certainly wouldn't mind seeing more chapters of this, if you do indeed decide to write more.
| Title: Sparring Partners rocks!
Reviewed By: Tyroki On: October 04, 2005 01:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this ^-^ Just as much as I love Su-chan. And being a friend of Su-chan, we can't help but love Motoko-chan too. You have both in one big story about the two of them... Dude... Your the best ^-^ Excuse me... I'm just gonna read this again >.> I like it alot.
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