| "A Gift" Reviews/Comments [ 48 ] |
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Reviewed By: kai01 On: May 26, 2005 20:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great update, Hatsu is jealous of temari! so cute! i feel bad for her thought, she's had such a bad life and all. update soon
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Reviewed By: dragonmaster86 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 12:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another nice little chapter! I was a bit disappointed that it was so short, but I suppose you can make it up by making the next one longer. I enjoyed reading about Hatsu's past and about her feelings toward Naruto. I can't wait to see what happens when Naruto and Sasuke meet again. One thing that's for sure is that there is no way Sasuke can catch up to Naruto now! Keep up the good work and update soon!
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Title: Overall Rating=>BEAUTIFUL!
Reviewed By: NarutoFan1231 On: May 23, 2005 02:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, I need to clarify that I am rating this series as a whole. In regards to the style of writing, I find it very well paced and word choice is excellent here. I can easily use my imagination to paint the picture of the story you have presented. Spelling and Grammer were good, enough said here. I think this is very original, besides the obvious use of Naruto characters and some plotline. I can find myself standing on the edge of excitement, arousal, and curiosity as I read through all of these chapters. Your ideas and character development seem very natural and well rounded, making the characters and storyline even better. Very well done overall. This was a great read and I would encourage anyone who wants some quality reading to read these chapters. The only criticism I have is that some characters are a little too extreme, past my personal veiws, but that is my subjective opinion. Objectively, I can find very few flaws, all of which are minor and need not metioning (i honestly can't remember them they are so minor. Great fanfic, I will make sure to check out the rest of your writings, if more exist. ^_^ Suggestions for future work: 1. Possibly develop some other love interests on the side. With Naruto and Temari marrying, it might get the others into thinking about their futures. 2. Sakura needs punishment. BIG TIME! 3. Try and involve some of the other villages from his past, the country of the Wave (where Zabuza and Haku fought team 7) in particular.
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Reviewed By: a naruto fan On: May 07, 2005 21:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent fic! please update!!!
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Reviewed By: dragonmaster86 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 25, 2005 09:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ANOTHER GREAT CHAPTER!!! So, Sasukes awake, huh? This should make the story more interesting. I love how you had Naruto propose to Temari! I'm so excited to read about their wedding! It would be so cool if you could get Sakura to TRY and ruin the wedding only to fail miserably. Also, WHERE IS KAKASHI!?! He's one of my favorite characters and he hasn't even been mentioned yet. At least have him attend the wedding, please.I'm sure Kakashi would be so proud of Naruto and how much he has grown. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!
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Reviewed By: krazyarchangel On: April 11, 2005 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this is really really good! haha ur imagery is very good i can picture it all in my head. an odd couple of naruto and temari but it somehow works the way u write it. and i do believe sakura is a *****.. i never liked her either haha
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Reviewed By: CB On: April 07, 2005 09:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lemon-Sex :10 Naota/Temari:10 This was a great fic. esp the Nar/Tam-lemoness God it was good. Write another plz. I dare U!!!
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Title: Just a few suggestions
Reviewed By: dragonmaster86 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2005 17:09 CDT
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Ok, I love this fanfic! Here are some things I, and maybe otheres would like to see in this story: 1. Put in more of Tsunade, Kakashi, and Jiraya. Maybe have one or two of them go to Narutos new village and check up on him. Not spy as enemys, but visit as friends. 2. Have Sasuke awake from his coma and ask about Naruto. 3. Put Rock Lee and Tenten in the story, seeing as how their teammate Naji left Konoha. Preferably make them good guys who are friends to Naruto. 4. Don't make Temari seem too weak in future fights. After all, she did defeat Tayuya, one of the Sound Four. 5. Lastly, have Tsunade give Sakura and Hyuuga Hiashi a HUGE tongue-lashing for what they pulled. Have her remind them just how many times Naruto saved the village and having him as an enemy is NOT a good thing. We all know how much of a temper she has, so let's put it to good use. That's all the suggestions I have for you. You don't have to use them, but just consider them. Keep up the good work and please update soon!
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Title: OH MY GOD....
Reviewed By: DemonGoddessSlayer [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2005 13:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gonna have to type in caps for this... GOOD MOTHER ******* STORY. BEST NARUTO FAN FIC EVER!!! KEEP ON UPDATING! I WOULD LOVE TO SEE MORE!!!! ^-^
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Title: Another great chapter!
Reviewed By: Ryuuza [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 20:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great chapter! I gotta say that I LOVE this fanfic! It's my absolute favorite! Please update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: dragonmaster86 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 22:56 CST
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Oh yeah...I forgot to ask this but, where is Kakashi? What is his part in all this?
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Title: BEST NARUTO FANFIC EVER!!!
Reviewed By: dragonmaster86 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 22:46 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was the very first Naruto fanfic I read on MM.org and ever since I have not found ONE other that can top it! I LOVE how you paired Naruto with Temari! The love they make is very sensual, as it should be. It's so detailed I can see it in my mind so perfectly. I also how you made Ino fall in love with him too. What I want to know is why they don't just have Tsunade heal Sasuke's injuries. I can't wait for the next update! Keep up the great work!!!
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Reviewed By: Shikari On: March 19, 2005 21:25 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
gret fanfic first time reading it good pairing with temari and naruto very original and its a nice break from those stupid yaois and last but not least sakura is a bitch.
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Reviewed By: PK On: March 15, 2005 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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yay, an update! great fic so far! i never thought shikamaru would be like that!! And sakura is just a bitch, so yeah! update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Base On: March 13, 2005 20:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story, I hope you write another odd pairing with Naruto.
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