| "Their First Time" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Title: Forget him
Reviewed By: karlmarx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 09:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Forget the first guy use dirtyer language and nice paring by the way it is manly m/m. Finaly one involving tifa that isnt a rape I hate rapes thay are so depressing and not hot I like the one shots well just wont to say keep up the good work and remember more smut.
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Title: Uninteresting at best, distasteful at worst
Reviewed By: Ardwynna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2004 18:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
You weren't kidding when you said it was porn. The dialogue was straight-out-of-a-porno cheesy and the plot made just about as much sense. I have no problems with hard-core lemons or PWPs but this read like some twelve-year old's description of what goes where during the act. Downright trashy and juvenile. A few suggestions for writing a good lemon: Don't use porn-star dialogue, Ease up on the dirty names for body parts, spend more time developing the plot and spell everything right! The rules of grammar and punctuation still apply to lemons.
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Reviewed By: Death_Phoenix On: July 22, 2003 05:14 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think the pairing is used way to little also, ive seen maybe four fics with tifa and cloud, where are more? please give me a link, thanks |
Reviewed By: N_Yah On: January 07, 2003 09:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just a quick note, The title doesn't really fit after chapter one does it?, hmmm.
Also, no the pairing has not been used to much.^_^ (Or at least not in the lemon variety, which consists mainly of yaoi >. |
Reviewed By: joonjp On: December 15, 2002 14:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
the pairing of tifa and cloud has been used to much. finish chapter 3. it was a good story. not that bad. dont always concentrate on the lemon scene, have some *action*! Great fic |
Reviewed By: Sab On: April 21, 2002 11:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The Tifa/Cloud Paring has been used too much. And PLEASE finish chapter 3! |
Reviewed By: AnihikaFudoh On: April 17, 2002 10:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
your fanfic is too short, and some people have already use costa del sol location. Why don't you try to write a fanfic with at least 50 pages? or maybe you take the story in shinra factory or somewhere else? or maybe in cloud vilage? |
