| "Kondomo no youkai" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Shinimegami21 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2007 10:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO UPDATE?!!? I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR EVER! Anyways, I really love what you've done with this story and would greatly appreciate it if you would update this story before I get old and die.
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Reviewed By: Firyn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 03:43 CST
Comment/Review:
Yay. This is really good, but you know what it really needs? An update! PLEASE!!!!! 'I reallywant to read more
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Reviewed By: yami no tennyo On: April 21, 2005 22:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like this first chapter but i must tell you that if you want the title to say 'children of demons' it should be 'youkai no kondomo' as japanese is translated backwards (for instance my name means angel{tennyo) of darkness{yami}) also if you want there is a better way to say half breed the word is 'hanyou' and it is actually a more derogatory term which would seem appropriate given the fact that they are treated lower than dirt those are just suggestions other than that this is really quite good i cant wait till u update soon hopefully my email is jefpeace@comcast.net if u hav n e questions or want n other beta reader or wutever ~yami no tennyo
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Reviewed By: tasukis_gecko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2005 02:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like it. And I want more dangit! Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Sivy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2005 07:29 CST
Comment/Review:
You have got to continue this, its a bit different then a lot of those part demon type fics, I hope to see what will come of this and soooon!
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Reviewed By: Mynona On: February 28, 2005 07:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
child in japanese is kodomo, condom is something entierly different. You've got a good plot going but there are several smallish faults that even though small makes it annoying. Your style of writing is common at best and too sparse at worse. You try to tell about the surroundings but you sometimes choses the wrong words. A tiger growling like a tiger... anyways, great plot just think about what you actually write.
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