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| "The Difference between Love and a One Night Stand" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2007 21:14 CST
Comment/Review:
update soon
| Reviewed By: Animeluver1368 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 20:48 CST
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Go back and correct spelling errors, they bug me real bad. Need more personality build up. How did Sakura become her little sister? YOU CAN NOT TELL ME THAT SAKURA WAS FUCKIN RAPED!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I mean, you just cant do that, tell me if I'm right. Because from what was said at the end, thats what it sounded like. But it was pretty good, just add details and fix spelling.
| Reviewed By: Angel_of_Elements [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2005 15:13 CST
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It was a good lemon, but you should be more descriptive. Do update cause I want to know what happened to Saki!!!
| Title: The Difference Between Love and a One Night Stand
Reviewed By: Dilanda Albata [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 23:29 CST
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Hey, that was pretty good for your first lemon^^*thumbs up*
| Reviewed By: twin_star_of_suzaku [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 22:28 CST
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well, I''m afraid i'm gonna have to give a bit of a hard critique... first off, you have like NO story line. none! we don't even know what kind of personalities Miroku, Souta, or Inu-yasha has, and we have no clue WHO Sakura really is. Kagome's personality is just barely developed, but it's still kinda stotic. If you're going to write an AU, you have to build alternate backgrounds, characteristics, and the like. Also, unless your story is more built out to be a PWP (plot, what plot?) kind of thing, you don't have a random sex scene in the second chapter! and that scene really needs to be built up. as it is, Inu-Yasha comes off as a "wham, bam, thank you ma'am" kinda guy, when we all know he's more sensitive on the inside then that! Your story has serious promise, but your whole story line needs a RADICAL overhaul.
| Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 01:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
good begining to the story. the purple writing is a little...loud...but otherwise, its good. Kagome has a couple new siblings, intresting and a sexy devil following her, ne? i got to say, i'll love your opening snide remark in the prologue from yash (the "you'll be full of me," one). that was perfect!!!! anyway, great story and i hope you continue it!
| Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2005 06:20 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ITS A GREAT STORY BUT WAS TOO SHORT ^_^
| Reviewed By: Angel_of_Elements [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:05 CST
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Grr....it was getting interesting. Do update!! ^^
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