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| "Keikendan no Tantei" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: nothing
Reviewed By: foxgirl28 (not logged on) On: April 10, 2006 17:19 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really good story, probably the best OC yu yu hakusho fic I've read ^_^
| Title: Deja Vu?
Reviewed By: KireiKiane On: May 10, 2005 01:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm...I think I've written something like this before (sweatdrop). Er, so far, it's starting out okay, but I also want you to think about some things. If Andrea is on the team...then there's too many team mates, isn't there? And if she's not on the team...why on earth isn't she with Keiko and the others, instead? And why DO they need a girl on the team who's only wearing her jogging outfit (sweatdrop). And one who looks like she's been kicked in the ribs (double sweatdrop). (Though...that wasn't bad description...but please...think of the situation...Oh, and remember..when they did get on the hotel, that was where they met two demons from the tournament...so not everyone had rich hair style...did they? o.o;; (I'd think some demons were poor...) Just wondering...Though I'd ask for a bit more description on the setting...and little less compare and contrast between your char and the demons...so that's all I have to say.
| Reviewed By: KireiKiane On: May 10, 2005 01:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm...I think I've written something like this before (sweatdrop). Er, so far, it's starting out okay, but I also want you to think about some things. If Andrea is on the team...then there's too many team mates, isn't there? And if she's not on the team...why on earth isn't she with Keiko and the others, instead? And why DO they need a girl on the team who's only wearing her jogging outfit (sweatdrop). And one who looks like she's been kicked in the ribs (double sweatdrop). (Though...that wasn't bad description...but please...think of the situation...Oh, and remember..when they did get on the hotel, that was where they met two demons from the tournament...so not everyone had rich hair style...did they? o.o;; (I'd think some demons were poor...) Just wondering...Though I'd ask for a bit more description on the setting...and little less compare and contrast between your char and the demons...so that's all I have to say.
| Reviewed By: Koritsune Dragonrider [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 17:27 CST
Comment/Review:
Great job! I liked it alot! You've got first POV down to a cinch! Hope you do more great ones! *Hiei* It was allright. More then allright! It was great! *Hiei* I thought I was a little OOC. You were not! *Yusuke* WHen's fox-boy gonna kiss her? *THWAK* *THWAK* SHUDDUP!! *Hiei* Well, she's feeling better.
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