| "Kagome-Mama and the Hanyou" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: Inuluvher151 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2005 00:50 CDT
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hey this is a really great story. Keep up the good work and I hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: NyteAngelOfDarkness7 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2005 16:18 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG IM SOOOOO HAPY YOU UPDATED....KEEP IT UP I LOVE THIS STORY
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Title: Long time no see
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2005 08:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the crystal cave scene, it seems familier to me somehow, but anyway I loved it...I hope you are able to get out more chapters before you move...its getting really interesting right now...
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Reviewed By: Tenshi Sukenami [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2005 05:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
BEST ONE YET!!! And talk about dedication. I'm in Greece right now and have to pay to use the internet. Yet I still HAD to read this chapter when I saw that it was posted. This was a beautiful chapter. Can't wait for the next one and good luck on the move.^_^
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Title: X
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 04:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hhummm *skratches chin* I wonder, where ever would one come up with they Idea of big shine swords coming out of pretty girls...Thats the first time I've read anything CLAMP like in a Inuyasha fic, and I have to admit that it was kind of nice, I always loved they way X seemed to make a bloody mess look bueatiful, and you seem to weave that imagery with the sceans in this fic...well done...oooh lest I forget, you limes predict a very steamy lemon in the future, I'll have to come back for more to see if its true.
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Reviewed By: NyteAngelOfDarkness7 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 15:54 CDT
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Omg i loved it~!!!!! Keep up the good work !
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Reviewed By: Tenshi Sukenami [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 09:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You practically wrote it for me...I feel loved!^_^ Excelent chapter. Kagome can't die! It's against the rules. (Who mades these rules, I don't know. But it's against the rules o_O) I hope you feel better soon. As to Sesshy and Rin, that would be great. I just posted my own Rin and Sesshy story yesterday. Over 100 people have read it, but no one has reviewed. MM really stinks at that. That's why I always try to review, especailly on the ones I really enjoy...like yours!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 23:39 CDT
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I like your story but it is difficult to read because all the paragraphs run together. Every time a different person speaks, a new action or subject of thought takes place, a change in the point of view (narrative) occurs, or a change in the place or time occurs, you should start a new paragraph. Only one person should speak per paragraph. Pick up a paperback novel and look at the paragraph structure. Follow that and you will improve your grammar/composition/structure problems. Also, you should place a blank line between each paragraph in order to make your story easier for the readers' eyes to follow each line (and not get lost in a huge block of script) and therefore easier to read. I wrote this review after reading the first chapter. I'll read the rest too, but I hope when you update, you consider your readers and format your story for easy reading. Thank you.
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Title: Woohoo!
Reviewed By: Tenshi Sukenami [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 08:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
EEEEEEEEEEE!!!! I'm so happy you got the next chapter up! Thank you a million times over. This was a really good one and I can't wait to see what Sesshy and Yasha plan to do. Tell your muse to get cracking, and the soda-bottle indused fractures you gave her don't count. ^_^
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Title: Adiction!
Reviewed By: Tenshi Sukenami [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2005 21:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That overall rating should actually have another 0 attached. I absolutel love this story. This is positively the BEST hentai I have ever read!!! (And believe me, I read quite a few) I've noticed a few grammar things here and there, but it doesn't matter. I want to be an English teach, so for me to be so distracted by a story that I don't care correct grammar, that story has got to be good. PLEEEEEEEEEEASE write again soon. You have me completely addicted to your story. Drink all the soda pops that you need to. ^_^
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Reviewed By: emmett1909 On: April 09, 2005 17:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
good structure to the story...has rhythm and balance...change of pace adapts smoothly...good formative description....sometimes, it gets busy and emotion drives into a swirling wind...less adjective usage will make your story easier to focus on development...enjoyable to read and very good effort for character portrayal....31/2 out of 5 stars...
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Reviewed By: Miko_Goddess69 On: March 28, 2005 22:14 CST
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i like your story sofar and i liked to see how it ends
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Reviewed By: Tarzan from fanfic.net On: March 15, 2005 00:46 CST
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cliffie aaahhh!
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Reviewed By: Tarzan from fanfic.net On: March 07, 2005 12:17 CST
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really great first chapters!! haha I love inuyasha's character and man those kisses *swoon* please update soon!!
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Reviewed By: bbb2 On: March 06, 2005 16:52 CST
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nice one, interesting, I want to see more. PLEASE?! thank ya,bbb
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