| "The First Duel Masters Lemon" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] |
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Title: ouch
Reviewed By: Moon_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2005 14:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is hard on the eyes. My fic atleast has meaning.
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Reviewed By: Rey Rey On: July 31, 2005 02:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting re-creation of ur Yu-gi-oh Ji! fic using Duel Masters this time. Hope u plan to continue ur other fic and this. Also haven't seen really any Duel Masters lemons. Keep the good work up.
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Reviewed By: you stink On: July 26, 2005 07:22 CDT
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let me fill you in on something there is not a creature in duel master with such a stupid names when i first stared dueling i never thought that any one person could insult anything so bad you sicken me
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Reviewed By: OH MY GOD On: July 26, 2005 07:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
YOU SUCK ASS YOU CAN'T FUCKIN WRITE TO SAVE YOU ASS!!!!!!!!! READIN THIS STORY MAKES ME WANT TO PUNCH SOMEONE WERES SHOBU AND WHATS WITH BLUE TEDDY GREEN TEDDY ITS SO FUNKIN STUPID I HATE YOU SO MUCH IT HURT DON'T QUIT YOUR DAY JOB
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Reviewed By: Moon_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2005 05:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Creatures that have to attck every turn still have summoning sickness.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 12:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 2 it was great. Keep up the great work. You are a great author.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 12:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love chapter 1 it was great.
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Title: Concerning stupid spammers.
Reviewed By: Shadow2003 z On: June 18, 2005 21:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
Man you guys need to review him, not flame him. He might feel a bit odd doing a whole yaoi pair. YOU GUYS REALLY SUCK. SCREW YOU GUYS, I'm GOING HOME!!!
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Title: Oh my god
Reviewed By: Someone who is completely ticked off On: June 06, 2005 02:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god this completely sucked!!!!! Where the hell is Hakuoh and Shobu, you stupid bimbo!!! This wasn't even funny!!!!! First change Knight/Saiyuki to Shobu/Hakuoh. then get some writing leasons. and no you don't have bragging rights the only reason peopple read this stupid thing is either they already did adn want to show their freinds how awful you are or the are completely oblivous to your horrible writing. God what the hell is wrong with you!? Have some more boy on boy action you stupid idiot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Moon_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 00:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Honestly I don't know why this story has more visits than my Duel Masters lemon.
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Reviewed By: Shadow2003 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 22:59 CDT
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I know you, you are that person that flamed the other story. Boy on boy? You sound like an angry person that wants to see Yaoi in his stories. You must be really bored to read his stories if you hate it so much.
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Reviewed By: none of your business On: May 21, 2005 00:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was totally pointless and it totally sucked. it was very stupid and boring. Where is Hakuoh and Shobu?! WHere's the boy on boy action?! God this story sucked!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Shadow2003 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 18:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
I don't watch duel masters but the first part of this seemed so sarcastic that I laughed for awhile.
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Reviewed By: Moon_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2005 02:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
okay X_X that was wrong on a million levels and then some. I write and like lemons but...X_X seriously now.
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Title: One thing!
Reviewed By: GreatPersonJD On: March 09, 2005 19:16 CST
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I do enjoy your lemon style and your YGO duels are awesome, but unfortunately because you are too new to Duel Masters you have made things waaay to ridiculous. DM is NOT YGO. There is no spell that gives you 3 mana (there is Ultimate Force which costs 5 and gives you 2 mana), nor a creature that would allow one to tap the others mana, and speed attackers are only of the fire race, and a 2 mana speed attacker costs 4. Also there are no change of heart effects. However, the teddy effect is perfect and interesting. Rothus doesn't allow you to pick the opponents creature. Sky Serpent is good tho. You want to have "enhanced" creatures not broken ones. For example you have Godly Charity which is an improvement over Graceful Charity. You could for example create a "Covet" for Duel Masters, just look at similar DM cards and cost accordingly. It's very dull duel when the opponent can summon such a cheap monster such as "King Khaos" and win. Itamiou cannot simply summon his Mystic Dragon by tributing the opponents monsters for example. You have overstepped the bounds just a bit in this case. Look over cards from all 5 Duel Masters sets and look at the mana costs. Then make a power house with a non-broken effect. King Atlantis bounces all creatures for 12 mana and is 12k and triple breaks. You could give an enhanced version the ability to draw for each creature bounced for example. Remember enhancement, not brokeness, and continue the super, kick-ass lemons. Laters.
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