| "what to do............." Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: Lil Lady 4u On: July 26, 2005 21:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the story but had prolems reading it. I suggest that you get some one to read over what you wrote and be your spell check. Overall I think it was GREAT I hope to read more ^-^
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Reviewed By: bettychan On: July 06, 2005 19:17 CDT
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I tried to read your story, but I can't. Whatever happened to spelling and grammer? What about punctuation? I know writing these stories are for fun, but it looks like, to me anyway, you don't care about how the story appears to your readers. Sorry, but I, for one, will not be reading this anymore.
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Reviewed By: fenris fenrir [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 12:59 CST
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okey dokie! nice plot, but i REALLY agree with the other reveiwers... S-e-s-s-h-o-m-a-r-u spells sesshomaru. and you would say "i saw" not "i seen." if you could say who "i" is that would be nice too...the first chapter starts as kagome, then is Sesshomaru, then is Inuyasha...you can write ~inuyasha's pov~ or ~kagome's pov~ ect... ("pov" stands for point of veiw) anyway, keep up the good work.
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Title: ok... i've got a propasition!
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn (sry nsi) On: March 16, 2005 21:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok do you need an editor i'll be happy to doit for you! ^__^ that way you dont have to worry about it i can do all the corrections for you all you have to do is E-mail them to me and i can E-Mail them back to you (w/ corrections done) ok? well if you decide to let me know you can E-mail me at MEAN_Punk@kiwibox.com ..... or if you have AOL ..... IM me @ Berlfam
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Title: awww...
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2005 14:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok do you think you could try to put in "quoteation marks?" it would be easier to read and put in something to let the readers kno that you changing POV because when it turned to Rin's POV i got lost and had to re-read the last sentence for a bit just to figure out who it was please can you try and make these corrections? it would really benifit your fanfic! ^_^ well keep up the good work and update again soon please?
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Title: ok....
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 10:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok you really need to go back and fix you chapters and spelling Sesshomaru's name would be good too! ^_^ well please update again soon please? and if you need a beta/editor then just E-Mail me!
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2005 14:56 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update soon its a great story^_^
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Reviewed By: I hate doing this On: March 09, 2005 21:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it. Please write more
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Reviewed By: ice_princess_1185 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2005 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it!! But your spelling My Sesshoumaru's name wrong^_^(It's ok I'm not mad and Sesshoumaru really isn't mine *crys eyes out*)
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