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| "Two to Train" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Cool
Reviewed By: colorless egyptian [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2005 15:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool. It's kinda hard to read, without spaces between paragraphs, I mean. But, other than that, I think this story was well written. Not as good as 'Truth, Dice, Or Roll,' though. But this is still a cool story.
| Title: umm...okay.
Reviewed By: Deathwatch Beetle On: May 26, 2005 11:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
...A bit random, but not necessarily ooc. It was, however, slightly smutty. About half way through it stopped being hot and just turned into an animilistic fuck fest. Which I guess some people are into, but not necessarily me. Hiei was a bit foward, as well.
| Title: I loved it!
Reviewed By: Theforgottenone [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2005 19:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it wow. I didn't like that Hiei was so demanding but i really liked it alot! GOOD job!
| Reviewed By: Blade Wolf On: March 21, 2005 15:55 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh wow. I really like your story! You're so much better than me. lol
| Reviewed By: R_Winner [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 21:59 CST
Comment/Review:
Ok, this has a lot of potential, but there are a few things I have probles with. I understand that this was made to be a PWP, but you do still need to explain yourself a little more. Ok, I kinda got the fact that Hiei and Kurama had the hots for Yusuke, but when did the plan take place to seduce him, if you will. The structure of the story is very good, but sometimes you seem to leave gaps in description and it makes it a little hard to follow... May I suggest a BETA, and take no ofence that plaese, even the best of writers have a BETA... Hell even BETAs have BETAs. In fact I am a BETA and would love to help you out with this, cause I think it's a rather cool fic... Hiei/Kurama/Yusuke pairings can be so much fun ^^.
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