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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 20:31 CST
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ALONE!?!? I wonder if Kikyo will be satisfied knowing Kagome's decision about her & Inu not being together in that way? And if Sesshomaru will be pleased about it. CANT WAIT TILL THE NEXT CHAPTER!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!
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Title: Update Please?
Reviewed By: SoulsAir [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2005 19:57 CST
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wow i really liked your story.. totally heartbreaking though ne? Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2005 23:35 CST
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I loved it! I cant wait to fond out what will be said and how things will turn out for Kag & Inu. Also I wonder how Sesshomaru will act with Kagome back. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2005 11:35 CST
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Great chapter, a little confusing though. I cant wait to see what's in store for Kagome next. UPDATE SOON!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2005 17:27 CST
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Great chapter! Loved it! Update SOON!
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Reviewed By: Hentai Zero [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2005 05:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I ABSOLUTELY MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!!!!!!! (switch from hyper excited fan to normal) Your writing is superb and has more refinment than most fanfic writers. This is a very enjoyable piece of writing. Please continue delivering such quality work. And may I say that it is a crime that you don't have more reviews. Update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed (nli) On: July 19, 2005 03:48 CDT
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I cant wait to read the next chapter. I really liked the dream sequences. Did they really happen? After all they said that time is in Kagome's blood. maybe traveling to the past through a dream? Eh prolly not, Sesshy would have remembered, right? Well newho keep up the good work & UPDATE SOON!!
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Reviewed By: RedHerring (no signed in) On: July 12, 2005 11:35 CDT
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Hmmm. Protectress is not technically correct. The word protector is not gender specific. Neither is the englsish language so much like latin-based languages where almost every noun or adjictive needs a gender modifier.//// Personally, I think it's rather stupid and immature to add an -ess to words like author and protector. We already know you are talking about a female, and it makes no sense to try and emphasize that more by adding an unnecessary suffix.
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Reviewed By: Darkflameangel(not logged in) On: July 12, 2005 00:18 CDT
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i think you have a pretty good story here so far. As far as everyone being in character...seems like they are and if they are slightly off, im sure you did it on purpose. and sesshoumaru is a tough character to write...that cold emotionless mask hes got doesnt help a person figure out whats going on in that pretty head of his...keep up the good work and update soon... Ja Ne~ Darkflameangel(aka DFA)
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Reviewed By: DFA On: May 09, 2005 00:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Darkflameangel here....to lazy to actually sign-in under my full pen name, but thought that your fic was more than worthy of a wonderful review...hmmm....it is very intriguing so far...plus having sesshoumaru in it is always good...you definately have got me guessing, so i dearly hope that you are going to update soon. if you ever need a beta to help you vent your frustrations on the story, feel free to ask me...but i suppose, since i cant find much to gush about tonight in regards to the fic, i shall give the ever present "Keep up the AWESOME work and update soon!" Darkflameangel
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Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2005 18:53 CDT
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The descriptions are good, as is immediately apparent. However, for emphasis, you do not use bold. You never, ever need bold font in prose. If the surrounding text is italic, you take off italics for emphasis; if it's regular font, then you turn on italics for the emphasized word. You also do not need to show each person yelling "Kagome!" Personally, I find that it looks like an excuse to take up space. All you need is a simple, "Kagome's companions panicked, yelling for her as they spotted her in trouble" or something similar. Also, everyone's default language is Japanese and it's automatically translated so that readers/watchers of the series understand it. Because of that, they should speak ALL English unless using actual names and surnames (like chan and sa. As such, "baka" and such should probably be avoided. You also should not use caps when someone is yelling. The exclamation point tells the reader that. Caps looks unprofessional. You don't need quotes around thoughts if the thoughts are italic; when you use both single and double quotes, the single goes inside double, not the other way around. You have a nice story going here, keep up the writing and thank you for submitting to FFARG. :-)
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Title: wer
Reviewed By: Hanyou_Miko_Higurashi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 22:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
tweekage cool/
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 22:18 CDT
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I like the direction the fic is heading. Possible Sess/Kag anywhere? Even if it's not the pairing, a bit of fluff cant hurt. The whole Kag being naked in front of Sessh kinda trew me though. I mean I see her as being a bit more modest. But really good fic so far, cant wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Besanii On: March 27, 2005 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good fic so far...im intrigued..some things are a wee bit fuzzy.. For one, did kagome forget she is slighly naked in this chapter...it may just be me, but if i had been surprised by a gorgeous male while bathing, id be wondering where my clothes are...granted, the realization that Sesshoumaru is extremely dangerous might affect that. still id rather be attacked or whatnot with some clothes on...keep up the really good work and i hope you will continue this story...its a different angle, and it seems to have merit..update soon.
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Title: morbidvortex
Reviewed By: morbidvortex [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2005 03:19 CST
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dont stress over it i think that this is a great story so far and look forward to future chapters
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