"Sakuma Otanashi" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: ^_^ Reviewed By: fire_senshi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2005 18:14 CDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review: Good chappie. Couple of suggestions, though. First, in the prologue you need to fill in the blanks. It sounds like in the 1st chapter you named the race, so thoses blanks need to be filled in. 2nd it would make your story reader-friendly if you put a double space between each paragraph. Online stoies are muy easier to read that way. Otherwise, the story is wonderful!!! Hope to see an update soon!! ~hugs n kisses~
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Reviewed By: Phill5015 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 18:41 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review: DITTO...
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Title: YAY! Reviewed By: fire_senshi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2005 11:16 CDT Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: You updated! hooray!!! I like it! Hurry and get up the next chapter! lots a luv. jaa!
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Title: ..... Reviewed By: fire_senshi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2005 14:25 CDT Comment/Review: you should think about finishing this sometime before you're 90 years old.
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