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| "Always With You" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: a little better
Reviewed By: Syrenna On: March 20, 2005 16:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok so I take it that the other whore is like Rayana's foil right? ok I get that and it is actually kind of advanced. And the poison or drugs or whatever, alittle bit more original. And the rape scene, it shows that you don't just write so you self insertion Character can have sex with your idol and that is cool, so ok our getting a little better.
| Title: I'm back and unimpressed
Reviewed By: Syrenna On: March 20, 2005 16:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your attempt at humor is kind of sad. And She climbs a tree and ends up in a cell, come on get some originallity here. Now I am just having fun criticising this thing, call me a bitch, but I am still waiting to see why you are as you boasted 'one of the highest reviewed authors' blah blah blah
| Title: Um....
Reviewed By: Syrenna On: March 20, 2005 16:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Um... ok don't take this personal, I mean that seemed actaully real, I mean the conversation between the two characters, but it's kind of a sob story don't you think? I mean are you just looking for sympathy because you got dumped? We all get dumped honey, deal with it, now I am not one to judge quickly so I will continue to read, it's your story but isn't the point of fanfiction to tell you favorite characters story? But I will continue to read, hopefully you can turn my decision around, and prove to me that this is worth reading because so far, not very original but it seems that you do use strong emotion while writting.
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