Reviewed By: SonSofia [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2006 14:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I had to laugh, was that the best you could come up with? He choked to death on food?!!!! A Saiyan choked to death on FOOD??!!!!!! That was a sorry excuse for angst, sorry, just being real. If you provided the right kind of death, it would have been a good fic. But that was just sad and I don't mean the fic. I mean you. The way you wrote it. You could have done a LOT better. He could have died from suicide, or someone killed him by accident, or he got crushed in the Gravity room, but no...he choked to death on food...
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