| "Confusing" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Bob On: April 04, 2002 16:57 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
First of all it was a good story but I would like to suggest that you get an English dictionary and learn to use proper sentences! |
Reviewed By: Sora On: February 19, 2002 03:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Tai and Sora are meant for each other. Please write more Taiora. Tai Rock Sora's WOrld. |
Reviewed By: Anorexic Chibi On: November 13, 2001 17:53 CST
Comment/Review:
I came in thinking I'd find another pure couple-shipping fic with an author with no talent, but I have to say that this was actually pretty decent for a first try fic (heck, you should see how bad mine were). You could do with some work on your grammar, especially tenses. You might want to find a beta-reader. If you want, I can help you with that. Contact me at anorexicchibi@yahoo.com. |
Reviewed By: Anorexic Chibi On: November 13, 2001 18:00 CST
Comment/Review:
Pretty good. And don't worry about not being sure about couplings, just don't ask your readers to sway you in either direction. And I was worried for a moment, thinking that this might be a Davis-bashing Takari, but my fears were relieved, you were just playing his goofy side. And you might want to focus more on the relationship between Matt and Tai and Sora, play on that some. That shows the best promise for helping this fic reach its maximum potential. |
