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| "The battle of Light&Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: I'm the write
Reviewed By: Tempesta2nd [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2005 14:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know what. This is a piece of Sh*t that should be bruned that shoot with a flamethrower. This is why is stoped write this Crap for a long time.
| Reviewed By: kazenoni [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2005 13:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Spelling and Grammar are both poor, it's a self-insert fic (in Eva that's a big no-no) and it hurts to try to read it (I assume you're not familiar with an invention called the 'Return key'). This may be your first fic, but that's no excuse. Spend more time proofreading and think about a story other people will want to read. Trust me, no Eva fan wants to spend page after page hearing how 'kewl' your avatar is.
| Reviewed By: 098765432123456 On: March 25, 2005 21:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Comment/Review:
Well that was my first fanfic that I started so F U
| Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 11:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I do hope that this is supposed to be a parody. If not, then I have to ask the question "What is wrong with you?" First, you really should invest in a spellchecker. Second, why should I care about your fantastic pilot (who appears to be little more than a thinly veiled author avatar)? Third, formatting. A new paragraph for a new speaker is the convention, and for good reason. Fourth, do you mean alchemy, as in Fullmetal Alchemist? If so, then I don't think that the story will work as the two worlds are too different. But hey, what do I know about fanfiction?
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