| "Slowly Sinking And No One To Save Me" Reviews/Comments [ 53 ] |
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Reviewed By: forever broken (at her work) On: June 02, 2005 09:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay! another good chapter! I like the part in ancient egypt! (I LOVE ANCIENT EGYPT!!) and ma'at seems like a really nice girl, but maybe I'm mistaken. (I forgot or you already told the readers: isn't ma'at some goddess? *is searching in her books* ah well.. I gotta go.. I'm at my work now so I can't write a long review! anyhooble! great chapter and I can't wait till you update, btw i also like this poem... it's a pitty I can't write poems that well *pouts* ah well.. maybe i should practise more....
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Reviewed By: paniwi (at school) On: June 02, 2005 01:51 CDT
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oh yeah, you're totally back, really one of your better chapters (or maybe that's just because you called me the 'great paniwi' mhuahahahaa *AHEM, don't mind me*) anyhooble the Ma'at part was nice, very nice, only at first I didn't get the scene change from ancient egypt ma'at to present day Ryou. I thought that Ma'at was going to Ryou and that Ryou was waiting the first 2 lines...I'm so stupid, maybe you could put down like 'in present day' or 'back with Ryou' or some stuff like that, just a suggestion, once heard someone put it this way in a review "you have to write as if you're readers are complete idiots even though there not, that way there will be no confusion in your story" does this make any sense? I hope I could help and not just pissed you off and yeah, I read your authors notes stuff (especially if you keep on advertising for me, again: mhuhahahaha) ok, I'm ranting PS: I would like to re-write the lemon if you want, I'll email it, see for yourself if you want to burn it!
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Reviewed By: ~JadeCade On: May 30, 2005 19:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My lemon!! *pounces* Yay! I'm reviewing here because ff.net is being a pain. Yummy lemon, yummy! I love this lemon, I shall save it in my favorites and read it every day.. Well, maybe not every day.. *shrugs* Very good chapter, still lovin' the lemon.. Hope you can update soon.
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Reviewed By: Nette JP On: May 30, 2005 15:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFG!!!!!!! FINALLY!!!! AHHHHHH!!! RYOU AND BAKURA TOGETHER!!! AHHHHHH!!! I LOVE IT I LOVE IT THIS MUCH ::holds arms out wide:: YAY I was soooo oh so happy when Bakura FINALLY confessed is love i just nearly died i was so totally stoked ::smiles:: and the lemon hehe ::smiles evily:: was REALLY good. And the poem was awesome as always. This is like the only fic that i have read that has poems in the begining of each chapter and i think that is is totally awesome because not only are the poems great they all fit with the chapters sooo well. I cant wait to see what happens between Bakura, Ryou and Ma'at. She is sooo gonna lose to Bakura. PLEEEEEEEEASE udate soon i cant wait!!!
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Reviewed By: Hiei's Gothic Angel On: May 30, 2005 09:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey thought I might as well review and leave a comment here since it's the lemon one! ^^; I will review the one on F.F.net too! WOW! you amze me once again! Finally he admits that he loves Ryou! I love the poem too! it's my favorite one yet! I can tell this is getting to a good part ^.- keep it up! it rocks my ever so loving socks! -Ukera
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Reviewed By: forever broken (to lazy to log in) On: May 30, 2005 02:51 CDT
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yay! great poem, as always! and the chapter was really good to! and you're right peope usually don't fuck on there first dates.. but hey for everything is a first time *winks* and the lemon wasn't that bad! AND SQUEE bakura confessed! *makes a happy dance* and poor malik and marik they're so gonna miss bakura! anyways it is a great chapter! I can't wait for you to update again! and about ma'at she isn't taking away ryou or something right! let bakura and ryou stay together *puppy dog eyes* pretty please *angelface* do I use a lot of !! or not.. anyway buh buy! and keep writing!
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Reviewed By: paniwi. On: May 30, 2005 02:45 CDT
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wheeew, niced chapter, and yeah, the lemon could have been better, and usually peeps don't fuck at first dates or whatever...maybe you could let more time pass before he meets ma'at, giving them more time to get ready to fuck...just my suggestion, anyway, keep at the poems, really good!
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Title: aka Dark Magician Girl / Hikaru on ff.net
Reviewed By: KuraMagicianGirl (not logged in) On: May 30, 2005 01:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eh, ff.net wouldn't let me review and plus I had to read the lemon anyways, so that's why I'm reviewing here. lol. ^_^ Nice lemon, hehe yummy. ^_^ And lovely ch, at last Bakura admits he loves Ryou and they confessed their love for each other, yay! lol. But I sense that something will happen during the next few ch, and it'll be something bad. Ah well, drama contributes to the plot. lol. The poem was awesome too, nicely written and fitting. Write more soon, see ya. ^_~
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Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: May 28, 2005 10:03 CDT
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this is getting interesting...all those love-triangles, can't wait too see what Ryou is going to do, and how the ishtars are going to respond. a little question about the different versions, how are you going to fit that in? plz update soon (and you're writing isn't crappy, and yes, once again the poem was really good!)
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Reviewed By: forever broken ( to lazy to log in) On: May 23, 2005 05:08 CDT
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eyos! YOUR POEM IS GREAT! AS ALWAYS! so stop whining about the poems they are really good!! *winks* and so is the story.. I don't really know what version I like the most.. but I like the ones with bakuraxryou! and FINALLY bakura kissed ryou! it took you a long time.. or should I say Bakura to find out! *can't stop smiling* yaaay finally! and RYOU DON'T YOU DARE CHOOSING FOR MA'AT!! go bakura!! ah well.. i'm ranting again! buh buy! and please update sooner! *puppy dog eyes*
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Reviewed By: Nette JP On: May 22, 2005 23:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As always a perfect 10!!! The kissing thing at the end with Ryou and Bakura i was all => YAY!!! FINALLY!!! I definatly want Version A or Version C. But I don't know what im gonna do without any updates ::crys:: its gonna seem like forever!!! I totally love the new chapter and the poem! I just love how you start avery chapter with a poem because it just fits sooo well!! Even if you are going on your trip PLEEEEEEEEEEEASE try and update before you leave!!! Oh and congrates on getting out of school in a week!!
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Reviewed By: vixinkitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2005 23:23 CDT
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This is great!!! I can't wait till you update this next time! And please update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: Angelic_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2005 09:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job I love this story! Your good at Writing! Especially your pomes!
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Reviewed By: Nette JP On: May 16, 2005 16:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I truley LOVE this story!! I like check everyday to see if you've posted a new chapter because you updat sooooo fast. One of the best things about this story are your poems. THEY ARE AMAZING!!! They just fit the chapters so well. I can wait to see what happens. I really want Ryou and Bakura to get together! HURRY AND UPDATE, PLEEEEEASE!!!!
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Reviewed By: paniwi (and forever broken) On: May 14, 2005 14:16 CDT
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please don't do anything stupid to yourself, always look on the bright side of life *hums* I love your story, if it helps any, and you should consider becoming an actual writer, and work on your poems as well, they're wonderful! really they are!
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