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| "Not 'I Love You', But..." Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Miko No Hoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2005 11:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let me first off say that I really enjoyed this. It's a nice take on Gateau and Marron, different, and that's hard to find. I was curious at Marron's reaction to being called gay...but I think I see where it could come from, very skillful of you to pick it out; makes one think a bit. There were a few little problems with POV (the switiching from 'him' to 'you' kinda got to me), a bit of grammer issue, but nothing that isn't fixable. Really great job!
| Reviewed By: Skylier On: March 29, 2005 15:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a really good story. I love the way you wrote it.
| Reviewed By: KazuLee On: March 27, 2005 18:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I gave your style an 8 because well it's so free flowing, like you're speaking and you aren't trapped in the box, it's very nice. Grammar has a 6 because it got pitchy in several spots with spelling, fragments, and the usage of punctuation here and there. Originality/creativity got a 9 because you weren't predictable this time (I tend to associate you with Marron and Carrot despite your other material) it was refreshing. The enjoyment factor got a 9 because it was so cute and funny in certain places, its Gaterron, you have to write it like that. Overall was an 8...well if you add the other 4 together and divide them by 4 you get 8 XD. It was good, just continue to develop and surprise us with wondrous variety.
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