| "Kagome's new pet" Reviews/Comments [ 44 ] |
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Reviewed By: themuse [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2005 03:02 EDT
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Hello. You have asked for truthful reviews, so I will try to provide such. Your premise and story line thus far is excellent. The characterizations you have going are consistant, and you seem to be one of the few authors that actually uses her spellcheck, although you might want to consider getting an editor to correct the grammar errors. The places that I think you could improve would be along the lines of style. There's a general rule when writing; "Show, don't tell". Rather than just explaining to the audience the rules and setting of your story, show them to us through character conversations, inner monologues, or character actions. If that seems too hard, you could always write a 'preface' to your fic explaining the setting and ideas that people need to understand. You want to avoid spending time explaining things to the audience in the middle of the story as much as possible. Other than that? The fic is great thus far, and I look forward to your next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Chibi-Inu13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 22:20 EDT
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Great fic! The plot is great and the relationship between Inuyasha and Kagome is very interesting. Are Miroku and Sango going to appear in this fic? And is Naraku going to be in this fic? Anyways, again great fic and please update soon!
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Title: AWESOME
Reviewed By: XxDemonic_PrincessxX [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 17:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome I love it update asap!!!
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Title: update!!
Reviewed By: Arienishi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 15:37 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic and hope you update soon.
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Title: Kagome's New Pet
Reviewed By: DemonicTenshi84 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2005 13:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I would of reveiwed sooner but for somereason I was aloud ¬_¬... so anyways Now I can Reveiw finally ^_^... I just want to say great Fic and keep up. I Love the story line and I can't wait to see what happens next. Well now I better go and wokr onmy fic before I get killed T_T.. don't ask I hate writeer block OK I ranting >.< sorry. Anyways great stroy and updat soon please bye bye for now *Vanishes in a cloud of smoke*
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Reviewed By: Stratas [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2005 01:54 EST
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Hi, I just found your story, I've been away from reading fics for awhile but anyway, I'm rambling. Great story, interesting plot, you've got me hooked *adds to favs*. Can't wait for an update.
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Title: next chpter
Reviewed By: Arienishi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 21:20 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THis story is so cool so far. I cant wait tell the next chapter. So please update soon. stillsullivan@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Zirra Nova [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 15:04 EST
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this is really good so far, i hope u update soon. too bad kaeda should of told her, *shakes head in pity* well onward... i think.. oh well. Zirra
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Title: I'm lovin' it!
Reviewed By: Ditke [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 11:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoah! It's fantastic. Please, pretty please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Celestial Fox [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2005 01:05 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update really soon. I want to see some serious reactions with Inuyasha and Kagome due to the bond. -wink, wink-
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Reviewed By: WinterWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2005 23:46 EST
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good so far, even if the chapters are a little short P.S. what/who does Kagome need protecting from
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Title: hmm.
Reviewed By: XxDemonic_PrincessxX [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2005 21:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very good update soon!!!PLZ!!!
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Reviewed By: TheAlmightyAya-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2005 21:30 EST
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This is great, please continue. I just love Inuyasha when he cant talk. lol. Anyways, I'll be watching for updates. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Inuyashas lover 2 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2005 14:47 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thank you for updating and that was fast keep up the good work. I love the way its going i just love it.by the way your on my favorites so I have my eye on you up date soon.I can't wait. for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Inuyashas lover 2 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2005 21:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
are you sure this is you first fic cause its great.its better than mine. and your like me its my first fic as well. welcome.hug hug. anyway is inuyasha a virgin and only had oral sex with her? Will there be lemons?( I love lemons cant get enough of them)and could you please make the chapters longer ( i know it was a tester) but please don't make it that short again. I would die. anyway great fic I love it for your first fic I sometimes don't like them but I beleve your the first. update sooooooooo.can't wait for the next chapter. update remember lemons lots and lots of lemons please. ja ne
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