Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2005 17:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
Gods below...where do I start? The grammar and spelling are atrocious, making it difficult to understand what is being said. The constant shifts in setting (especially time) make it even more difficult. Spellcheck might not help much since it only catches misspellings that don't form other correctly spelled words (e.g., it probably won't catch 'were' for 'where'). As it is, I have no idea what is going on, just that Sesshomaru, Inuyasha, Kagome, and the rest of the gang are out to kill Naraku. Learn to spell characters' names and use that spelling consistently. Miroku, Naraku, and Kikyo are the main issues. Fiction is usually written in the past tense, not present. At least you stayed with the tense you picked, though. Too many beginning authors shift back and forth (I did it myself the first time I posted something).
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