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| "The Virus of Life" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: Excellent Story!
Reviewed By: ZaynabShahar On: August 09, 2005 22:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. I thought it was very well written. I especially like the way you made each part of the story go along with the lyrics. Alot of originality and creativity. Spelling and grammar were good as well. Yes, it is brutal and sick... But hey, It's Legato. What do you expect from him? Wine and roses?
| Reviewed By: wolfiegroupie [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2005 00:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is interesting...I like your premise--Legato as a rapist works for me and in fact I'm surprised there aren't more NC fics with him out there. My main suggestion would be to spend a little more time emphasizing his character (what makes Legato Legato) and more about why Knives is pissed at her (not just she is seducing people--I'd like more background on her) because it seems like it could be anyone attacking this girl, since he doesn't use his psyonic powers or any attempt at mind control, doesn't sense her hiding (although his "perceptions" are accurate about the knife). I guess I'm saying I would like to see more Trigun stuff in the fic. And yes, it's a bit brutal, but I was warned, thanks! :) There is a new quasi-rape Trigun fic on adultfanfiction.net you might like FYI >:)
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