Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 27, 2005 15:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to FFARG. This is a well-written script that actually looks like something that could be performed. It's pretty funny. However, it has a number of typos and transposed words, such as when Lady Montague names Romeo a 'rouge,' and when the Lords order 'Off with there heads!' I'd suggest getting someone to proofread this. Also, the mixture of Shakesperean and modern English sounds unnatural in places, particularly when it occurs within the same line. You have a shakey grasp of the difference between 'thee' and 'thou.' Thee is used as the object of verbs and prepositions; thou is used for most other functions. When using these pronouns, verbs take a different form, thus: Thou hast.... These forms are not used in the third person; it's 'He hath....'
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