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| "Lace and Strawberries" Reviews/Comments [ 30 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Oh,Saki!
Reviewed By: akeleven [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 01:47 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can see why you say Naruto is OC, but I think you could make him more in line with the original if he spoke in shorter sentences and did less thinking. (hmm -sounds like an insult but that is the charm of his character - simple minded and enthusiastic). But the complex Sasuke you are building here is genius! Excellent reading on the outcome of his hangups. So, on with the show, it's entertaining!
| Reviewed By: VickiLe On: August 06, 2005 05:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, you sure as hell like to play with people's minds. (But in a good way) There's lots left to the imagination.....
| Title: Pretty Baby
Reviewed By: blisblop On: July 16, 2005 11:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am in awe.This fic is just the best.I didn't know you updated .I am so so glad you did.Sorry if this sounds creepy but the kinda sweet/sour creepyness of this story is just so appealing.Gah.I can't believe there is a second chap.Anyhoo,Naruto talking to her and handling her is just so hot.This is definetly the best fan fic for Naruto and Sasuke I have ever read. Sasuke being so deadly yet having the will power to let go like that and Naruto is grand so lusty and fair minded,All these contrasts you have set up are so very well constructed.The imagry you bring to mind is divine.If I can influence you at all keep going,this is just so much fun to read.Beautiful.
| Title: A one shot with two chapters.
Reviewed By: Sweet deily (not logged in) On: July 10, 2005 19:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Well, I've never understood why yaoi fans are so obsessed with crossdressing. But for the cliche, this was written very well. However, I found it 'too well written'. The details were overwhelming in parts and I tended to lose track of what I was actually seeing. Was he wearing a long skirt or a short one? Was it fluffy or was it stiff? You skipped between really messed up present tense and past tense which only added to my confusion, and some of the scenes were hard to figure out because you over-spoke them. However, it's a good piece of writing despite this. You've done a nice job, done justice to the cliche and given some good lime-smut. Your characterization was a little... I dunno, I've always looked at these characters in a certain light, so maybe it's because of this that I found them OOC. Actually, for what you did, I thought Sasuke was IC, but Naruto was the one acting weird. Anyway, whatever it was, the characterization got me to. I know, I know, it's a 'PWP, so there isn't much need of characterization' most people say, I think the reverse is oposite, and there's more characterization needed from PWP than any long going stories. But whatever. It was a good story, descriptive, but descriptive to a fault.
| Reviewed By: complexphoenix On: July 08, 2005 13:23 CDT
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Argh, the thing butchered the last sentence and I accidentlly double-posted and I don't see any means of going back to delete and edit. Meh. It seems to have mistaken my hearts for HTML tags. What I wrote was, Once again, I love love love you, Asuka. You are truly a top-notch writer! :)
| Reviewed By: complexphoenix On: July 08, 2005 13:08 CDT
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OMG I LOVE this fic. The idea of Sasuke creating an alter ego to fill up the holes that the oh-so-cool avenger persona doesn't allow to be filled is VERY compelling. I really like the idea that, although he does an excellent job hiding it, he's psychologically quite weak- it's a lovely explanation why he doesn't return the affection of Sakura or Ino, because they're psychologically weak too and he needs a partner who's strong, someone who will not demand constant reassurance but will rather reassure him. Ultimately both of his personas are disguises- each one conceals some aspects of his basic self while openly presenting others, so neither is really real and neither is really fake. At heart, he loves being both a ninja and a doll. It is also interesting that both personas seem traceable to the trauma of losing his family. He needs to be a strong ninja to avenge them and keep his clan safe once it's rebuilt, and he needs affection to fill the void left by the loss of his precious people. Once again, I
| Reviewed By: complexphoenix On: July 08, 2005 13:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
OMG I LOVE this fic. The idea of Sasuke creating an alter ego to fill up the holes that the oh-so-cool avenger persona doesn't allow to be filled is VERY compelling. I really like the idea that, although he does an excellent job hiding it, he's psychologically quite weak- it's a lovely explanation why he doesn't return the affection of Sakura or Ino, because they're psychologically weak too and he needs a partner who's strong, someone who will not demand constant reassurance but will rather reassure him. Ultimately both of his personas are disguises- each one conceals some aspects of his basic self while openly presenting others, so neither is really real and neither is really fake. At heart, he loves being both a ninja and a doll. It is also interesting that both personas seem traceable to the trauma of losing his family. He needs to be a strong ninja to avenge them and keep his clan safe once it's rebuilt, and he needs affection to fill the void left by the loss of his precious people. Once again, I
| Reviewed By: iPUNCH On: June 02, 2005 23:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hmm, what is something clever to say? (insert paragraph) *drools*
| Reviewed By: benjai On: May 30, 2005 20:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
itai...how could you just end there. This was splendidly written, I wait for more delicious, sexy angst patiently ^^
| Reviewed By: Sasu/Naru Lover #? On: April 17, 2005 12:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*spazzes* OMG!!! That was... was... was.......... gah!!! ^^ That was amazing!!! Very kewl idea, and wonderfully written -- I can sooooooo totally see Sasuke being that way, ya' know? ^___~ keep up the good work!!!
| Reviewed By: Prae On: April 14, 2005 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What can I say, I don't think I've ever seen something to complain about in your fics. Your ideas are always so fasinating. And the way you weave psychology into this, it just adds to the experience. I feel sorry for Sasuke, trapped as a doll. And yet, the tune of the story is believable to an extent. And I love the way that Naruto understands him SO _well_. Sasuke really IS fucked up. But then... that's often what makes the story sell, isn't it. Is there going to be another chapter?
| Reviewed By: dinkscythe (toolazytologin) On: April 14, 2005 14:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The 1st-person POV in 3rd-person tense really works...yeah. Sasuke is fucked up. However, this really works for him! ^_^ Truly, I like the psychological bend to Naruto's thoughts on Sasuke and their relation. As their fucking. With a bunch of people watching, unaware. Kinky.
| Title: Drools
Reviewed By: blisblop On: April 13, 2005 00:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the best,I love when peeps get into a freak.It is also sweet and Funny as Hell.They are both so brave.Can they do another mission or can we see what happens right after this fic?Pleeeeeze?
| Reviewed By: Empyreal [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2005 18:00 CDT
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Like all of your fics, great writing (= The idea of cross-dressing Sasuke is a disturbing one, but you pulled it off nicely. Poor Sasuke and his boots, that was just too amusing to me. And Naruto's thought about always knowing Sasuke was screwed up was hilarious. Look forward to more fics (=
| Reviewed By: benjai On: April 11, 2005 23:34 CDT
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Ahhhhh, thirteen?! *feels like a criminal* Very nice, your smut is as usual, incredible.
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