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| "Sedcution of Tenoh Haruka" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Henio [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2005 08:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED THIS STORY!!!!! Great job.
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Reviewed By: J.R.Karsten [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story, but your need to work on letting us know who's talking. If you bunch a lot of quotes together it makes it hard to know who's who. I do however think that with Setuna it would be hard to seduce Hakura, and that was writen very well, expecialy at the end. I do hope you check some of your grammar, because that's one of the main things I look for "I'm" and "You'll" is something you should put in and make sure is there. Great work, just check on a few things next time and you'll go from great to flawless.
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