| "Wishes May Come True" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: Sheena On: October 03, 2002 23:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I loved the originality and feeling you tried to express in this fic. My favourite part was when Goku and Bulma were looking after Vegeta. Fancy you making me get worried like that, I mean no other b/v fic I can recall had Vegeta throwing up. Pretty stressful for my opinion.
I think on my opinion you are a good writer and should keep going with your works.
Now the critical part, I know I know bit mean aren't I. Well... All in all the only thing needing to change is your spelling and grammar. But I see that near the end of the fic you got better at it so I'm impressed.
So ignore what others say as you have a gift with writing so don't stop!!
God Bless
And keep your pen movin! |
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2002 00:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hi!! I'm only @ chapter 9 right now, But I wanna review anyway, This story is coming along really good so far. But the flames ppl write yu are really bad. You do have alot of spelling/grammar mistakes but that's nothing to flame about. Oh and by the way heh heh, I think it's bad that ppl flame about Freezer/Freiza raping Vegeta, cause alot of fanfics put that...but umm...both Freezer and Freiza is right. Freezer is actually the original japanese name for him. Freiza is like the American version...so you shouldn't have flamed that guy back.... |
Reviewed By: kandi On: January 22, 2002 18:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was a great story. but the grammar was a little harsh, lowering the grade. please write more!! |
Reviewed By: Susan On: January 03, 2002 06:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaaawwwww. That was sweet. I really enjoyed this fic. Good Job. Peace. |
Reviewed By: mizu megami On: January 01, 2002 21:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good...no great story just one question. whats with the letter notes? |
Reviewed By: Susan On: January 01, 2002 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please, please not another cliffy!!. Is he spelling out her name? But then again that would be too obvious. Bulldog? Bulgaria? Bulldozer? HHHHHHHHHHHHHHEEEEEEELLLLLLLLLPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Susan On: December 30, 2001 04:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good. Veggie is getting impatient. I'm still trying to figure out what he's going to spell out. Please update asap. Happy New Year. |
Reviewed By: Oblivian Flame On: December 29, 2001 18:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The fic is great. When you get the next chapter posted email me at Blueoblivian@hotmail.com |
Reviewed By: Allie Zorn On: November 24, 2001 09:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
While this fanfic possibly could have evolved into an enjoyable one, the author's carelessness makes it diffucult to understand. Nothing stands out about the style; colloquial diction is used and the syntax is at an elementary level. The spelling and grammar, however, are the fic's biggest downfall. If the reader is able to translate the sentences, they still have to reread the majority of the text just to see where the sentences begin and end. Personally, I think the cast is out of character, but all authors enjoy artistic license. This story does not flow well, uses elementary words and mechanisms, and shows that the author didn't even take the time to reread her work and correct glaring problems. She would do well to read any piece of literature, even other fanfics, like Alan Harnum's "Waters Under Earth," just to see what an outstanding fanfic is. |
Reviewed By: Cait On: November 22, 2001 22:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UR story is awesome. Pleeze write more, I get so hooked on these fics. I luv them!
Thanx! |
Reviewed By: Shorty On: November 22, 2001 15:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this fanfic. its original and pretty damn good. I don know y those pple rank on u so much for bad spelling, fuck them. Anyways, just wondering what happened to ch.8 it goes from ch 7 to 9. just wondering, dont wanna get u mad. Keep up tha good work. |
Reviewed By: dbz27 On: November 21, 2001 21:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic!! It was very creative and original!! Keep up the excellent work.....and what's up with all those people who are flaming ya about spelling??? Who cares.......anywayz, keep on writing!!!! |
Reviewed By: Biggitz On: November 21, 2001 17:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I wanted to rate it because your story is the best! please hurry w/ the next chapters!! |
Reviewed By: Sue On: November 21, 2001 18:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read all the chapters before deciding to rate this fic. Despite grammer and spelling errors here and there, I was still able to understand what you were trying to get across to your readers. You have a very good imagination and I can't wait to read what happens in the upcoming chapters. Peace |
