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| "In the Dark Room" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] | Title: Hervorragend!
Reviewed By: Jay911 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2006 03:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Few stories deserve to be considered 'outstanding', by the definition of the word, but this is one of them. I had to force myself away from the computer earlier today, only because I had to get to work - otherwise I would have been compelled to read it all in one sitting. Your story reads like a true extension of the series, and answers most of the questions people have had about what happens next, etc. Profoundly well done, and thanks for posting it!
| Title: Hervorragend!
Reviewed By: Jay911 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2006 03:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Few stories deserve to be considered 'outstanding', by the definition of the word, but this is one of them. I had to force myself away from the computer earlier today, only because I had to get to work - otherwise I would have been compelled to read it all in one sitting. Your story reads like a true extension of the series, and answers most of the questions people have had about what happens next, etc. Profoundly well done, and thanks for posting it!
| Title: Wonderful story
Reviewed By: Ickabod On: March 18, 2006 15:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read a lot of post 3rd impact stories and out of all of them your's seem to address the relationship between Asuka & Shinji the best. Your writing flows wonderful from chapter to chapter, Characterization is spot on, and spelling is perfect. Truly one of the best eva fanfiction's around. Your a very gifted writer. I hope to see more excellent fanfictions pieces from you in the future. Ickabod.
| Reviewed By: GArvin 2000 On: January 09, 2006 14:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOOMMEE!!!!your's is the first i've reviewed in 6 months.THAT's how good it is.I love the 'weird.' Don't Stop writing and update.[story summary may turn people off though]
| Reviewed By: bairdie On: December 06, 2005 20:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think its a pretty good story, despite the fact its angsty and involves asuka, who im far too similar to to usually be able to enjoy this kind of story. but it is pretty good, wheel thought out and with the least amount of spelling mistakes ive seen in a long time lol. ive never seen a spam filter like taht bfore either
| Title: Shock-tactular!
Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2005 22:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now, normally, I don't throw out a ten rating like that, but this story deserves it. Normally, I don't dig on post-third impact stories, since that always seems like such a hard set-up to tackle, but it works here. Maya's post-tramatic stress really work nicely. All the characters are brillantly realized. Very rarely can an author, especailly a fanfic author, stay true to the original characters as presented in the series but at the same time make them their own creation. Original characters are very diffcult to handle, but you make it work. Mariko is equally scary yet sympathic. Even though her going super-crazy in the last chapter kinda' bothered me. You had avoided cliches up to that point. Also, the ending goes on way too long. I see that you wanted to wrap everything up, but normally I like my endings a little more on the ambiguous side. Still, this is definately the best fan fiction I have read in a LONG time. Did I mention your personal style is also great? Equally funny and personal, makes you think, laugh, and really get into the head of the character. This is just a real opus, man. You should totally be proud. Looking forward tot he proposed sequal, when and if it happens. Mariko is a great character. Like Peter Lorre in "M." Asuka's scars is a great touch by the way. And the dream in chapter four, I think it was? Man, great stuff! It starts all hot and bothered but then goes really bad. Anyway, good stuff. I'm running out of room. In the Dark Room rules!
| Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 21:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Spoilers ahead for those who haven't read it yet. I just got done reading chapter nine, so I won't publish the whole review, but I just had to say this, Mariko is the serial killer but Asuka is the one acting crazy. This story friggin' owns man.
| Reviewed By: Big D On: August 30, 2005 00:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story. I should have reviewed it a long time ago. I think the writing style is what really pulled me in to the story; it was smooth, and intelligent, always making you think. That, and the storyline was creepy as can be. I don't normally care for horror, but this is a classic style of horror that was very effective. The only part that bothered me was how, to maintain the suspense, a lot of little things were left out that would really have been nice to see. In particular, I would love to see you go back and add a chapter dealing with Shinji finding the girls (I always assumed he made it home before the emergency teams did, and found them), observing his thoughts as he dealt with the shock, trying to keep Asuka alive, and the trauma of the wait, and ending with the first conversation after she woke up. One other thing that confused me--Hikari never once mentioned Touji's name before she left... but he was with her when they came back to see Asuka out of the hospital? What exactly happened there? I didn't quite get it. There were also a few exchanges here and there where the topic suddenly changed. In some cases, it was easy to follow and I enjoyed the shift in context, but in a few others, I simply couldn't figure out if the topic changed or if descriptive text had simply been left out. For example, when Yukie suddenly switches from talking about Hikari to talking about Mariko abruptly. I did enjoy the Aki and Mari cameos. Those two are always fun.
| Reviewed By: Link the Midget On: August 21, 2005 17:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You NEED to make another fic like this, or a sequel.
| Title: omg a good fic
Reviewed By: tinklebuttt On: July 24, 2005 03:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
usually I find fan fics dull and unimaginative. especially with newlly added characters. however your story was by far the best fan fic. it was.....highly enjoyable. you should write more stories.
| Reviewed By: D.J. On: July 10, 2005 15:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story. I like the way that everything was realistic (at least for NGE). Everyone has developed some but still has their major personality traits. And I like how there were a lot of people who didn't like how Shinji did things during 3I, but I would have liked if you could have went more in depth in that and maybe had Shinji try to explain himself a bit better. But this was a great story and a great read. I look forward to your next one.
| Title: For lack of a better descriptor
Reviewed By: braincraft On: July 09, 2005 19:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bad. Ass. Thank you for making art.
| Title: Good Read
Reviewed By: Alpha Zulu On: July 09, 2005 06:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good read. It was also an interesting and novel approach for a fic. The similiarities between the Mariko/Asuka relationship and the Shinji/Kaoru one were nicely counterpointed. I'm looking forward to reading your other works when they are ready.
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