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| "Valentines" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: O-O
Reviewed By: Kiko Kamia [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2005 11:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
okay, first i need to get this out . . . sheshomaru giving inuyasha THE TALK??! am i the only one to find that a wee tiny bit disturbing? *looks around with everyone nodding* that's what i thought. keep it up, psyco!
| Title: yay!
Reviewed By: purplellama On: August 31, 2005 18:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
good fic so far! I love the part where sesshie hugs inuyasha, and the part with 'evil villain' cologne. funny! write more, please!! XD
| Title: very good
Reviewed By: jeannita On: May 25, 2005 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah when r u going to make more story
| Reviewed By: howling On: May 04, 2005 19:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
i think you should update soon
| Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2005 22:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
The first thing I notice is that you really should double space between paragraphs. It is a lot easier to recognize the beginning of a new paragraph when there is a blank line between them. Also, typing in caps is entirely unnecessary, even if they are yelling. The exclamation point and the verbs "yelled" tells us that. Do not type in caps like that. You have many sentence fragments that do not work in your favor, such as "not thinking of the repercussions from doing that." Also, ellipses, "..." are four periods if at the end of a sentence. You also require a comma after dialogue and before the verb, i.e. "Hi," Kagome said (or remarked, muttered, etc.). Your grammar could use a little work, especially commas. You may wish to check up all the rules online or in a grammar book. While I'm at it, you do not use numerals for numbers; instead of "3," use "three," and instead of "24," use "twenty-four," etc. Spelling is rather good, as is vocabulary. You have the makings of a good story, but you should work on the mechanics. Thank you for submitting to FFARG. :-)
| Reviewed By: Sakota [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2005 21:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great job Inughost! as like to say keep up the good work! oh G2G Ja ne!
| Title: Still got it...
Reviewed By: Evil World Leader On: April 20, 2005 16:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Evil World Leader: Like I said, InuGhost, you've still got it. Good story.
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