Reviewed By: DOA101 On: November 24, 2001 20:46 CST
Comment/Review:
First on the list is your explanation, where the Guyver is concern, it is straight forward and
easily understood.
Explaining what the bio-buster armor is capable of doing, that is not a good idea. I would
advice that you explain the capabilities, armor regeneration and weapons system of the bio-
buster armor in the story line it self.
Explain what Zoanoids are. Explain that Zoalords are capable of controlling the Zoanoids,
but do not go into detailed explanation of there abilities and weapons, ones again leave that
as part of the story line, just as it was done in the Guyver anime, the full explanations were
always given at the end of a chapter, and only what appeared in the particular chapter, but
even then the explanations were not extensive, things were left out deliberately, only to be
explained fully down the rode, you should consider do the same.
Above all, explain that the aliens made the Zoanoids and favored them allot more then the
out of control Guyver experiment, also do not forget to mention that both the Zoanoids
and Guyvers, were in fact made as bio weapons to be used in a galactic war the aliens were
fighting. Mention that the aliens abandoned the entire project suddenly and left, then bring
it up to date, explain that Chronos continued with the aliens abandoned projects, and that
they are the only ones who posses the technology to make Zoanoids and Zoalords, but
ones again do not go into grate detail, use the detailing for your story line.
I would advice that you do not use short form at the very beginning of the story.
>But that had proven to be too much energy.They tried all known forms of energy, but none of them were strong enough to power the
P.U.G. They soon found that a rare type of bio-energy could be used to power the P.U.G.
if enough was supplied.In another room a tall man stood watching the scientists intently. A thick air of power
surrounded the man. “The fools”. Why would chronos waste the manpower to conquer
worlds? When it has yet to conquer this one. When the P.U.G. is done we can randomly
send our enemy’s to other worlds where their powers would be useless and that they will
no longer be a threat to us. At this thought the man grind a predatory grin. The man
walked out of the room and found is way to the control room. Walking to his office which
was a room adjacent to the control room and sitting at his desk. He called his assist and
told him to get the chopper ready to leave at midnight tomorrow night. Two miles to the west of the base, hidden within a wooden enclosure was a small
encampment. Only the smoldering fire and the half-eaten meal showed that the camp had
been recently in use. About a half a mile east of the camp was a clifface with large rocks
and boulders clustered around its surface. It was behind one of these boulders that a young
man stood hidden from view. |
