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| "The Rose" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Title: wonderous
Reviewed By: kashumaru [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2007 14:28 CST
Comment/Review:
This was a fantastic oneshot fanfic you wrote ^ ^ yes it was sad but fantastic none the less. I am very glad that Inuyasha told Kagome his thoughts, and admitted to them and the way you had added in the rose bush that grew by their graves, that was wonderful too. Spleded job once again ^ ~
| Reviewed By: InuBaby369246 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2006 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. When you write something sad, it sure is SAD. It's nice how Inu finally realized that he loved Kagome, but it sucks that it was so late. By the way, I like how you ended it, even if you did make me shed a few tears. It was truly beautiful.
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 21:20 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A sad piece, yes, but a good one none the less. I liked it a lot.
| Reviewed By: GuardianOfTheShikon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2005 01:10 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHAAAAAHAHAAAA!!! THAT WAS SO SAD!!! IT WAS SO BEUTIFULL!! KEEP IT UP!!
| Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: BakaBokken [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2005 22:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your story to FFARG. This is a very beautifully written piece. Your style flows well, and for the most part, grammatically correct. I did catch a few mistakes here and there, but nothing major. The imagery in this story is beautifully done, the lyrics are well-used, and the story itself is quite touching. On the flip side, this story line (character death - especially InuYasha, Kagome, or both - during the "final battle" with Naraku) is slightly overused in the IY one-shot world. You did a very nice job with it, but it isn't unique. In addition, there were a few spots that were slightly inconclusive (i.e. the transition between the last scene with InuYasha/Kagome and the section where Kouga arrives was a little shaky). Another critique is the view on Kikyou, as I would not have characterized her as merely a "hell bitch". This could be an individually-based view on her critique, but I feel her character wasn't given proper consideration. InuYasha's character seemed a bit off in a few places, but it wasn't too noticeable, and it could be justified (at least partially, I think) by the circumstances you present in the story. A few grammar mistakes (which I mentioned already) were present as well, but not many. Overall, this is a nicely-written, solid story. Great work, and I do hope you continue to write. Thanks again for contributing to FFARG. ^^
| Title: wow
Reviewed By: LaLa13 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2005 07:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is absolutely beautiful! Even if I don't like the idea of Kikyo being a 'hell bitch' you are a wonderful writer, and if Kagome and Inu had to die, I can't imagine a better way. The only thing I would suggest is putting breaks in, so that the reader knows that time has passed. And I didn't really get that the two had died, because you said the survivors were huddled together, and then described how Inu and Kagome looked. It sounded like they were still alive. But other than that, wonderful story. Very beautiful.
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