Reviewed By: S On: April 29, 2005 19:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style: mm, you waste a lot of words on descriptions. cut back on those and be more concise. don't cut back too much, because depiction is your main ability, but use words that describe more things at once and don't make every other word an adjective. S&G: as we discussed, watch tenses. not too many problems on spelling that i saw, but run a spelling and grammar check with something before publishing. Originality: like i said, demonic/psychic pit-fighter is not new. you do it so well, though... Enjoyment: a solid read, despite your formatting. make paragraphs! a writer must write both because he wants to and so his audience can enjoy his work! Overall Rating: mm. it's on the right track, but there are some serious faults that may pop up. i need to see where you take this before i give a definitive answer.
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