| "One Night" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Shu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 11:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yeah for your first its not that bad they are right though i would make it longer and more foreplay not just straight to it
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Title: Nice job
Reviewed By: Yuri Susuki [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2007 22:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
You did well for your first lemon. one thing i recomend is to try some creative things in the middle of the lemon and not just go straight into it. Bive some time for 4play and make it last a little longer but you are an amazing writer and i hope to read more of yours soon. ~Yuri
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Title: O.K.
Reviewed By: Aelita [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2005 14:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was okay I guess, but I like stories that are more romantic. Good idea though, and a good pairing. :)
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Reviewed By: D-Reaper Originalle [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 17:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well that definitely was a quickie... Good pairing; I'm usually a yaoi whore but that was kewl- partly because you were the first person to mention Samantha! That was definitely a plotless lemon; concise and to the point. I would give you some constructive criticism but there was not enough stuff to work with, and besides, who cares with hentai! Good first try!
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Title: so-so
Reviewed By: Sakura_Tree [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2005 10:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
It was good but I find it a bit short for my liking.
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