| "Unforeseen Obstacles" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 16:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like where you're going with this. I like how you fit a great deal of canon anime plot in the latest chapters with the woman who loved Sesshoumaru, and with Kagura. Thank you so very much for sparing Kohaku. I have to say the way you had Sango "get over" Miroku was pure Sango, and very IC. Thank you very much, and please continue with your story. >>>>>>>>>>Kin-chan Pandun. ............................... ... ................................. PS: The writing style here reminds me greatly of The White Dog by Becky Tailweaver (which is a great fic). I was wondering if you have read that fanfiction?
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Title: Review Chapter Sixteen
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 16:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! *giggles* That scene with Rin becoming Miroku's daughter was so cuuuute! Oh my gosh, that was just adorable! *claps hands in joy, giggling like a schoolgirl* ................ *squeals* I can't get over it! It was soooo adorable! *ah-hem* Sorry. Please continue, Kin-chan Pandun
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Title: Review Chapter Thirteen
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 15:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I really like this story, but what's with the character thoughts and confessions sounding like cheesy romance song lyrics? It's my ONLY beef with this fic. It sounds really dumb. Nothing like that would happen in real life, and there isn't even any basis for them acting/thinking like that in the manga or anime. It reminds me of top 40 songs, Tatewaki Kuno, and general falsehood. nothing so cheesy can be real. ...................... On the other hand, I really like your story. I like the plot and (on the whole) I like your caracterizations. Please keep up the good work. Please amend the cheesy italics (unless they're a stylistic thing, then go for it). >>>>>>>>>>>>>Luck! Kin-chan Pandun
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday On: June 14, 2005 14:53 CDT
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OMG!!! YAY!!! *does happy dance* the code is changed!!! now it's purely Sess/Miroku!!! hehehe!!! *jumps around**giggle* oops.. i hadn't meant to type that... but anyway, excellent fic!! still my #1!!!
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday On: June 10, 2005 15:19 CDT
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OMG!!! i just realized that the first fanart thingie is yours!! that is such a good drawing of miroku; he looks so cute!! sesshomaru's hair is really poofy, but it's hard to draw his bangs. i've tried, and i can never get the hair right... long anime hair is such a pain in the ass to draw... oh yeah, and the story is progressing nicely too. BYZ!!
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 20:19 CDT
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YAY!! you updated really fast!! also, interesting turn of events with Rin... now one of miroku's problems of being with sesshy have been fixed!! update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 16:54 CDT
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hello again!! please continue the fic (it would also be nice if sesshy and miroku were together..., but whatever you choose i'll keep reading!!) update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday On: May 30, 2005 21:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
sess/miro= totally awesome. (: miro/sango= SUX. /% (i can't figure out how to make an angry face with the keyboard...) this is like.. the only sess/miro pairing that i have ever seen... i love the pairing sooo much (very original). don't split them up.. please?? *puppy dog eyes*??
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Reviewed By: zzoaozz [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 23:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it, very emotional and tight. One word... MORE!
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Reviewed By: Mr. Wednesday On: May 25, 2005 22:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
KEWL!!! you updated REALLY fast!!! ditto to my last review. i'm sorry, but i'm really tired and haven't slept since monday... i'd write more praise for your outstanding writing, but i'm sleepy and going to bed. g'night.....
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Reviewed By: Mr. Wednesday [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 15:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hi again!! i am SOOOO happy that you brought Miroku back!!! i would also like to address the fact that i gave you all tens. most would just give tens to be nice, but i really mean it. this is the first fic i have ever given that rating. Also, many fics that have sesshomaru paired with someone have him immediately accept the fact that he is comming to like the person (very OOC!). your fic has Sesshomaru much more in charicter. that is normally very hard to do, but you do it exceptionally well. yet again, i must say that i LOVE the sess/miroku pairing. SEE YA NEXT CHAPTER!! please uptade soon!!
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Title: good
Reviewed By: bookwormloverjen [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2005 11:52 CDT
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very good, nice choice of pairings, never really thought that those two would do anything but try to kill each other, but good none the less
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Reviewed By: Mr Wednesday [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 19:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i LOVE your fic!! sess/miro is quite an original pairing... they work very well together. but OMG!!! you KILLED miroku!!! how could you??? i'm very interested in what you will do with the story now. what will happen to Sesshomaru? will Miroku be revived somehow? if not, will Sesshy be paired with someone else? NEway... please post some new chapters soon!! P.S. if you want a beta reader, my e-mail is: kagomes_servant@yahoo.com SEE YOU NEXT CHAPTER!!!
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Title: More!
Reviewed By: out92 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2005 22:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, I would've wrote earlier when you first started posting, BUT I had to remember my ID for this site....figures I would loose the ID for the BEST fan fics! I love this story, great wording, good grammar, great details! More more more more more!
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Title: *giggles*
Reviewed By: Ghothika94 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2005 09:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cute how you made Sesshoumaru like chocolate..please update
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