| "Mate of the Forbidden Child" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] |
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Title: question
Reviewed By: Asian Tinkerbell On: February 13, 2007 22:40 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Are you sure aime means beloved? Because I take French and I could have sworn that it means "like"! Adore means love....so yeah...but it doesn't matter cuz the overall reading was the awesomest thing ever. I have never read a Harry/Hiei fic before. That was the first ever...to me anyways. Keep up the good work and update soon! =^_^=
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Reviewed By: kitsunesdeath [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2006 18:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
let me guess the toddler is koenma. i know i am right so where is my cookie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Oriya-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2006 14:45 EST
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This is a story that I passed over many times and never got the nerve to read it until now. It is a pretty good story, but I am dissapointed with how fast it goes. There is little detail, and the fact that you skip parts that you don't deem important in something that turns me off as a reader. I was also wondering about the abruptness of a Hiei and a Harry pairing. It was a little too sudden for my liking. I thought that one of them would have doubts, Harry being human and not having been exposed to homosexuallity. (And if he has, it was never mentioned in the books.) And then there is Hiei, a demon, who has said on more than one occasion that he can hardly stand humans, much less, I don't think that he would be all to happy to be mated with one. It just seems to me that you rushed through it, and you are not giving the characters much time to evolve into a relationship or the attitude that you want them to have. I also think that Heromione and Ron are a little ooc. You did not pay enough attention to them to show us their characteristics like a witer should. Heromione and Ron are Harry's best friends, even if he was mated, I don't think that he would just play them off like he did in your story. I liked the nickname 'pronglet,' and it probobly would be something that Sirius would have ended up calling Harry if he had lived. These are just my ramblings, so if you want to disregard them go ahead. I do want you to know that this is an interesting plot, but I think it needs some work. But hey, no one's perfect. I'm not the best writter either. Ja!
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Title: Very nice
Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2006 09:07 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story. I hope you write more soon
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Reviewed By: kahuffstix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2005 22:44 EST
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Stupid toddler= Koenma
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Reviewed By: kahuffstix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2005 22:16 EST
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i loved this story. it was so great. please add more to this story soon.
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Reviewed By: stix On: September 24, 2005 14:56 EDT
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i loved this story. it was so great. please add more to this story soon.
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Reviewed By: law916 On: September 19, 2005 11:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I so glad you found your mojo and update. I loved the last chapter. Please update soon. Thank you!
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Reviewed By: law916 On: September 09, 2005 00:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it your story is good and lemon was hot. I can't wait for the next update!
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Reviewed By: Ladyfox20 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2005 14:05 EDT
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Nice I love it.
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Reviewed By: Ladyfox20 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2005 16:37 EDT
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I love this story! I am happy that you now have help in writeing this story. I shale be calm until you finish it. Untill then happy writing
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Title: M.O.T.F.C.
Reviewed By: unamed On: August 26, 2005 17:21 EDT
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Would you update already!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is not sitting while with me!!!!!!!! You'er not updating and I'm not happy about that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Kuramas gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2005 21:17 EDT
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Pronglet? Update soon please.
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Reviewed By: BlackAngelChan On: July 16, 2005 17:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow awesome story. Try doing something in the OotP pov. Continue this story.
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Reviewed By: Bandgeek On: June 29, 2005 05:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay another good story. A good idea in my opinion for one of the future chapter would be seeing how Harry gets control of his new powers if he does at all.
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