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| "Ethereal Eternity" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: archaon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2005 19:32 CDT
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And, lo, it's a cliffhanger!! Don't worry too much about the perspective and thought changing. As long as you hint who does the thinking-as you have done- there is little room for confusion. That was a quite intense chapter that keeps the readers on their toes. And because you offer us so few hints as to what is really going on, the reader's imagination rages to find horrors in the shadows. That's why I like fanfiction;-) You achieved the same feeling I had the first time I entered the shadow temple ^_^ While it is a bit slow at some points, as if you try to stall a bit, it doesn't particularly bother me. The next chapter should be interesting. Will you choose to built up more pressure, or will you reach a major plot point? Until next time...
| Reviewed By: archaon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2005 21:46 CDT
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Hi again!! Don't mind me, I review at random times. I had the impression this was a one-shot, but you proved me wrong. Not that I complain;-) Though I have difficulties writing fluff, I can easily read it when it's well written and the pairs are... even remotely reasonable-_- And that's the case here;-) It seems this is going to become a large story. Are you going for another epic? I like Impa's character the way you have presented it, a mother figure for Zelda. And it seems Gannon is back... I hope you can explain that adequately. Big bad guys coming back might be overused, but as long as it's correctly explained, every storyteller is allowed to 'pull a Sigma' LOL I know from personal experience that to present extended thought of a character, much work is needed. A great job there, too. On the format, just a detail. Sometimes you italic things that shouldn't be italicized and vise versa. The reason I hate placing a fic under a genre label is because no story can be interesting without many aspects. If your story was solely romance, it just wouldn't work. It's a good thing you incorporate some humor and some angst (and perhaps some adventure?). That's why all my non-one-shot fics will be 'general' along with anything else... I just saw you uploaded strings of fate, but I'll likely be away till September, so I can't review yet...Probably...
| Reviewed By: Archaon` On: May 22, 2005 15:58 CDT
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Hi, there!! Since I love Zelda games, I just have to review this one. Your descriptions are great, as usual, a bit exaggerating at times but I like that. Though the games reveal too little about Link's personality, your portrait fits him. The interaction with Navi is great, though I believe that was Tatl's personality- Tatl was much more outspoken than Navi, if not irritating. I really laughed at the punch line. We miss you at Ffnet and I hope you will stay in both sites. When are you going to enter Megaman category here?
| Title: w00t
Reviewed By: Sesshomarusmisstress [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2005 01:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOu are a very descriptive writer, and i have enjoyed your fic, its been so long since i've played orcania of time, but just reading this has jogged all my memories. *sigh* i love you Link!
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: whirleeq [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2005 19:02 CDT
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This is a beautiful bit of work. I have to say, having spent far too many hours playing 'ocarina of time', I pictured everything that you described as I was reading this, and it was very easy for me to understand Link's mindset. You even went so far as to include a little tidbit about the fisherman who ran his business by the side of lake Hyrule! Very detailed and in depth. My only criticism is that you might want to watch your formatting and your punctuation in the future. You used the dash '-' in a few places where a semicolon ';' would have sufficed, and you trailed off with three periods '...' quite frequently - enough so that it was noticable. Also, is this a one shot or a lead in to a much bigger fic? Where it ended made me think that it was a one shot, but the story description says that it is incomplete. If it is a one shot, you probably want to add that it is one to the summary, and change the status of the fic to complete. Overall, great job and thank you for writing this! -- Julie
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