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| "When Everything Changed" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Naako [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2008 18:53 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well i don't feel very smart at the momment. I just realized that you are doin an arc from your Baby story. I guess what I'm trying to say is I'm starting from the begining. I did like this chapter its really good, but kinda weird since I already know what's goin to happen.
| Reviewed By: Helcat805 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2006 17:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aswome!!!
| Reviewed By: dragon of the west On: July 30, 2006 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
what was that? you could have ended it better like them kissing maybe? Well whatever better luck next time and end it with a KISS!!!!!
| Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: Spirit Bagel of Death [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2005 08:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was pretty good. I think that you repeat words alot, and you really nead to proofread because you're missing letters in words like " spine" but despite the choppiness of your style, this was a really good one shot. You captured the sexual tension between the two exactly, and I like how you made Kurama a bit more human. There is this misconception that just because he's yoko, he's this perfect, graceful, calm little human boy, and people tend to immortalize him thus. Then, when someone writes him having a bad day, the call it OOC, but I liked it. Hiei, on the other hand, was a little...mushy. Still, it was realistic, the way he left at the end, so Kudos to you. Keep writing!
| Reviewed By: DK_Joy not signed in On: June 18, 2005 12:25 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
That was great! Why hasn't anyone reviewed it yet? I can't wait to read your other fics now! I'm gonna put you on my favorite authors list. I wish Kurama hadn't said anything - it was getting really...good. Yum!
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