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| "Missing" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: sglily - not logged in On: May 05, 2006 22:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
I am bad... you had mentioned in a review LONG AGO you had written a story. I checked it out and remembered reading this and just didn't match author to story... silly me! Your story is sad! Heartbreaking in fact! You had also mentioned who the characters were although, quite honestly, when I read it, I thought they were the two that I write about. It's all about love, isn't it? Love and misunderstandings... and everything that goes wrong from there. And, unfortunately, things went very, very wrong in your story from your characters standpoints! It is well written, making the reader feel the pain that the character is going through. Once again, my apologies for a late review! I think you need to write a much happier story next! ; )
| Reviewed By: ToxicHathor [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2006 03:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is so good! really, i love evanescence and i love the way you've written the first two chappies, and the way you mingled the story with the lyrics, amazing work, honest! i hope you tell us mor of what happened soon! Hathor
| Reviewed By: toasterwoman360 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2006 00:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice fic.
| Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2005 02:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it it was very sad. Poor Yugi and Yami in love with each other but misunderstanding led to disaster for them both. It was suspenseful and mysterious. Great job.
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: June 22, 2005 14:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
that was very sad indeed, the suspense was good, very different from the usual yugi-suicide-fic, you did a good job on this
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: The Panasonic Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2005 08:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Let me start out by saying that you have a very good grasp on plot and suspence. I like how the story pulled together and how you wrote his feelings. It was very nicely put. However, some of your wording seems a little awkward. You have little mistakes through it that can be easily fixed with a good beta. There are numerous threads in the forun dedicated to finding betas. I would suggest you try to find one just to look over it and fix those little things, like grammar and usage. Also, the story itself is rather short. If you take out the lyrics, it doesn't seem to be more than 1200 words, and for a one-shot, in my opinion, that's a little too short (unless you're doing a drabble). This story has a rather complicated plot, and I think more justice would be done if it were longer. But that isn't exactly necessary. It's a nice story at the length it already is. I would just find someone to read it over, and I think you'll be just fine. ~Pana
| Title: dragonlady222
Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 07:54 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you are not ending it there. Very sad story. I want to see more.
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