| "Breaking Free" Reviews/Comments [ 44 ] |
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Title: bitch
Reviewed By: cacoKILLA On: May 29, 2005 18:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude god-king so kinds right, like he aint proud enough. but i think other then that, you got him down.
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Reviewed By: God-King On: May 28, 2005 00:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i didnt like this last chapter to much. it seems you need to kinda learn more about vagetas character. other then that i think that this was ok. Shadow-King seys hi.
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Reviewed By: BROLY_ROCKS On: May 26, 2005 19:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice. way to make him more evil. i kind am getting the fealing that it aint gona be just broly. oh well it still coo thought.
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Reviewed By: Kicken2500 On: May 24, 2005 23:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
fuck yes, this is just what i need to read. this was realy cool man. i hope you update soon.
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Reviewed By: nightmaregod On: May 23, 2005 01:29 EDT
Comment/Review:
my bad, also this is almost as good as the last story you did. it looks promising.
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Reviewed By: nightmaregod On: May 23, 2005 01:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
on shadow kings instructions, i and my friends are to R&R this and the story your friend is writhing. please e-mail teh king man with the story.
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Title: hahahahahaha
Reviewed By: Shadow-King [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2005 13:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool. good work on the chapters man. ^_^ not eaven being sick will stop me from reviewing. i will get some people to review soon. update soon. ^_^
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Reviewed By: oznerol On: May 20, 2005 22:33 EDT
Comment/Review:
*goes into raged induced comma* doctor: um i dont know what that means but continue or she might never wake up
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Reviewed By: Laini On: May 20, 2005 20:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG well it is a good story..but god broly is so violent w/ chichi.if he wants her to be his mate he shouldnt have to pound it in her.lol but its a good.and when is veggie head gonna come in?!!!! hehe well keep at the good writing.Update A.S.A.P. b/c i wanna read more,MORE i tell you!! :)
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Reviewed By: Mely On: May 20, 2005 19:28 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like where this story is going. Great Job!!!
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Reviewed By: chantal [MediaMiner Member] On: May 20, 2005 04:44 EDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this fic. It is not a typical DBZ story.
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Title: bad news
Reviewed By: twackfackler On: May 20, 2005 01:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
um well good chapters, but...um...uh... Shadow-King, he he is realy sick.
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Reviewed By: AltairKaosu [MediaMiner Member] On: May 18, 2005 22:59 EDT
Comment/Review:
The premise is interesting, and the plot seems fairly developed, but your spelling and grammar could use some work. I'd suggest using a spell check program and finding a beta reader. Good luck. ~Altair
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Reviewed By: Condesa On: May 15, 2005 20:20 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting, please update!
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Reviewed By: twackfackler On: May 14, 2005 19:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey its david hear. Shadow-King syes yo and apoligisez for the unreliyability and the loss of his computer, and that he should be back in a few days. so far this chap is cool. i see you changed some, thats cool. and no the title is good, and the summery is too. if i may quote Shadow-King: "no worries"
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