| "Reflection" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Ambient Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2002 09:05 CST
Comment/Review:
I don't know where anyone thinks the font is really BIG, cause it's perfectly average size. Unless you like reading font size 8 or something...anyway, nice improvement, keep on going! Go, go! |
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2002 19:21 CST
Comment/Review:
So far I think this is actually very good. The characters are soo funny at times! Esp "Papa-sama" and Ms. Ani the "Pixie". The plot looks very promising from what I see. Best of luck writing. ^.~ |
Reviewed By: digibitch [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2001 06:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have an okay beginning so far, however you could use a little help with the following...
Style of Writing: You need a little more desription of things other than the girl. You also have so-so transitions from one thought to another.
Spelling & Grammer: It's pretty good. I didn't catch any large mistakes.
Originality/Creativity:
I don't really know where you are going with this. It sort of has that "it's been done" feel, but there are also some differences.
Enjoyment Factor: I like the idea, but I can't really see what's going on as I read. I'm also a bit confused about what time period this takes place.
Overall: This fic has potential, with a little cleaning up, this could get pretty good.
My Favorite Part: I like how you had the girl say watch she was dreaming about rather than showing the dream itself. It makes it sort of mysterious.
DB
DigiBitch@Team-rocket.net |
Reviewed By: Umi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2001 20:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a tad short...and the font was BIG. I can't say much about the story...but you need to have more to it for it to really be a "chapter", but short prologues are fine I guess. The dream sequence was confusing...but I don't know how else you could have done it. All I can say is I hope you write more descriptively in future chapters. |
