Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Nekotsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2005 04:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I'm just reviewing chapter one for now as according to FFARG regulations, but I thought I'd add that once I'm done I'm going to sneak a peak at your next chapter too. Thus far your writing is fluid, easily understandable and impeccably spell checked - at a casual glance, I didn't see any errors. Description is fine, and I like some of your phrases in describing Riku and his thoughts. The 'zombie' line was great, as was the rest of your dialogue. ^_^ My only real suggestion to you is that the line between present and flashback is a little blurred - I had trouble picking when you jumped between the two. Perhaps put the flashback of how Riku got there as a separate section? Either way, you have a well written story and it's a pleasure to read. Thanks for submitting to FFARG!
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