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Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Dumas1 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 16:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting to FFARG. This is a very well-written piece that gives an excellent look inside Alucard's head. I'm not an expert on Hellsing, but it fits what I know of him. Some of your sentences are a little awkwardly constructed and could use a little revision. Here's an examaple: And I shall be young still when Integra will be but a pitiful thing.... That would work a little better as 'And I shall be young still when Integra is but a pitiful thing....'
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Reviewed By: Shadow-King [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 02:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice that is totaly what i think he would have thought or even said at one time. this was cool. ^_^
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